Everybody during their life has to make very important decision in different circumstances. While some believe it is better not to make big decision alone,others against it. In my opinion, eventhough taking advice from experts is always valuable and save us time and energy ,we have to make important decisions of our life alone. My reasons go as follows.
First of all, we are the one that is responsible for our life. Nobody even the closest friend or family are not in charge of our decision. In addition, we are alone in lots of situation Specifically emergency one which is not enough time to consult with others. So, making decision alone, bring us more experience and capability during time. When we know that we will be alone in our responsibility, we need to think about our choice carefully and obsessively. After making decision,we have to do our best. Studies showed that people who make decicion on their own tend to do their best more than others to be successful. Thus, making decision bring responsibility and more commitment to work.
Moreover, nobody knows us better than us. We all know that what we really want and sometimes talking to others makes us dubious and confused. In other words, consultasion is not always helpful and even could be confusing due to not knowing the real interest and power of everybody. For instance, when I was in high school most of my teachers agreed that I am very good in thinking and solving math and it is better to continue study math in university,
but I really wanted to study art because it was my passion. Now I am happy that I did not do their advice and followed my dreams. I did a lot of work to reach my goals and became successful in my work.And, because I took the risk by myself, I did not blame anybody in time of desperation. In fact, we ,by making our own choices based our desire, would not blame anybody else in our life. We know that we make our choice based on our underestanding of our needs and interest . Therefore,after choosing a path we are the one that have to deal with that. If we made our decision based on the consultations that we had received, in time of the difficulties which happens in different situation, we would blame others and will not fight for being successful. Therefore, sharing our decision by others can distract us from our real passions.
In conclusion, although taking advice from experts could be very helpful and give us insight beyond our vision and could be eyeopening, every big decision in our life has to be made alone. This approach, not only means we are responsible for our life and are in charge of the outcome, but also prepares us for better strategy and more focus and better results. In fact, nobody knows our goals and interests better than us.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5664893617 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62407019683 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505319148936 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2511231364 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3684210526 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7894736842 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21052631579 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102518678423 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0366305304269 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447147595051 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0742585252596 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632004602222 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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