Learning is a lifetime skill and people learn from different people during their life. While some beleive people learn better from their peers and their own level, others think differently. In my oppinion, people learn things better from those at a higher level due to their more experience and more acceptance.
First of all, higher level people such as teachers or supervisors are more experienced. They have the knowledge and background. Most of them are in their position due to their more practice. So, they are familiar to the problems and the caviate in their jobs and this make them a better teacher to learn from. In fact, they have past trough the same process before and their advice are more realistic. Our peers are in our level and their knowlege is not complete and thorough, thus their advice may not be as helpfulness as higher level people. In fact,higher level people advice is more practical but our peer advice is not complete and is based on their little exposure to the fact.
Moreover, people can accept advice from higher level people easier than their own level ones. In other words, when we want to learn something from our own level people we are under pressure of comparing and not accepting. It is something in our mind that resist to learn from them. Our mind considers we are the same and this belief prevent us from learning from them and this makes resistance. Studies showed that in our brain, resistance is a preventive tool and curbs growing. For instance, If our teacher or supervisor gave us advice, the chance for acceptance and use is higher than our coworker or same level persons advice and we consider it less personal and approach differently. We do not like to see ourselves undermined and this prevent us from learning properly. Therefore, advice and teaching is more acceptable and desirable by higher level people than peers.
In conclusion, although learning from the peers could be very helpful and wise in some area, learning from the higher level people is more pleasant. Not only high level people are more experienced and knowledgeable and their advices are more accurate and helpful but also their advice and words are more acceptable for us .
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Learning is a lifetime skill and people learn fro...
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Line 1, column 121, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...r life. While some beleive people learn better from their peers and their own level, o...
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Line 2, column 553, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , higher
...pfulness as higher level people. In fact,higher level people advice is more practical b...
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Line 3, column 255, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'resist learning'.
Suggestion: resist learning
...pting. It is something in our mind that resist to learn from them. Our mind considers we are th...
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Line 3, column 615, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... higher than our coworker or same level persons advice and we consider it less personal...
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Line 4, column 321, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ice and words are more acceptable for us .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85638297872 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46018324534 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452127659574 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.141921261 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275500668997 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118019917561 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111213461309 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203457648847 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0842306142519 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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