Learning is a lifetime skill and people learn from different people during their life. While some beleive people learn better from their peers and their own level, others against it. In my oppinion, people learn things better from those at a higher level due to their experience and being more acceptance.
First of all, higher level people such as teachers or supervisors are more experienced. They have the knowledge and background. Most of them are in their position due to their more experience. So, they are familiar to the problems and the caviate and this make them a better teacher to learn from. In fact, they have past trough the same process before and their advice are more realistic. Our peers are in our level and their knowlege is not complete thus their advice may not be as helpfulness as higher level people. In fact,higher level advice is more practical due to thir more exprience and are more realistic
Moreover, we can accept advice from higher level people easier than our own level. When we want to learn something from our own level people we are under pressure of comparing and not accepting. It is something in our mind that resist to learn from them. Our mind considers us as a less desent and this makes resistance. If my teacher or supervisor give me advice I can accept it and use it but about my coworker or same level person , I consider it as an assult or even brag. We do not like to see ourself undermine and this prevent us from learning properly.
In conclusion, although learning from the peers could be very helpful and wise, learning from the higher level people is more helpful. Not only they are more experienced,but are they also more acceptable for us .
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- TPO 1, Integrated Writing 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Learning is a lifetime skill and people learn fro...
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Line 1, column 121, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...r life. While some beleive people learn better from their peers and their own level, o...
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Line 2, column 527, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , higher
...pfulness as higher level people. In fact,higher level advice is more practical due to t...
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Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'resist learning'.
Suggestion: resist learning
...pting. It is something in our mind that resist to learn from them. Our mind considers us as a l...
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Line 3, column 434, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...t about my coworker or same level person , I consider it as an assult or even brag...
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Line 4, column 169, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
...pful. Not only they are more experienced,but are they also more acceptable for us .
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Line 4, column 210, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...but are they also more acceptable for us .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, in conclusion, in fact, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1401.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6856187291 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46422958684 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491638795987 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 440.1 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1866992801 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.4117647059 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5882352941 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330591241424 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120467974828 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0917412806216 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218077193406 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0862722669967 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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