In spit of the past rules that was based on religion and nonchangable, recent approach to the rules are completely different. Nowaday, in developed country, rules are made based on scientific approach.In fact, by assessing the rules during the time, they are open to any improvement and even change.Developement of the rules in every society shows their modern thinking. However, there are arguments against the new change. While some believe new rules strict the younger people life ,some think against it. In my view, new rules are easier for younger people and my reasons go as follow.
First of all, new rules are less strict and we can see that kids and young age people have right to oppose which was very strange in the past. In history ,we read a lot about how kids and young people had to accept their older people advice eventhough they were sure it was not right. For example, there was not any right for having new ideas .Young people had to follow their parent job and married based on their desire and so forth. Young people nowadays have more freedom to choose their job and follow their desire.
Moreover, new rules lessen their responsibility to be responsiple for the life of their parents. Before, people were responsible for their parents till their death.They had to send money for them and took care of them. New rules and social improvement in the society changed this expectation and we can see lots of senior care center and wellfare to support them. These social supports take away the pressure from the young shoulder. So they have more freedom to live their favorite life.
In conclusion, although some beleive new rules are against young people, I think they have more freedom and less strict than before.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, so, well, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8127090301 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41590591296 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528428093645 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5462815464 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9333333333 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9333333333 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240937776942 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897831748746 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496744926851 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153065170632 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439605836037 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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