It goes without saying that in this sophisticated and radically progressive era in which we live, all human beings have always been involved in a great struggle to participate in charities and help the fellows to have a better life in the near future. Whereas some individuals debate that providing food, housing, and medical cares for poor people is really in priority and necessary, on the other side of the continuum, stand others, believing that giving money to poor people in order to start a new business for themselves is the best notion. As far as I am concerned, I categorically concur with the second mental attitude, believing that starting a new even small business is more significant for those people at the moment. In the ensuing essay, my perspective will be perspicuously substantiated by the underlying and conspicuous reasons.
To begin with, no one casts a shadow of doubt on the fact that if a person starts a small business, he will be able to hire some other people who need a job. Under such a circumstance, if wealthy people give even small money to different charities, charities can provide and create many job opportunities for several poor individuals. It is noteworthy to mention that if those individuals increase their knowledge and improve their level of creativity, they enable to readily become prosperous and successful in their job and provide a better life for their family. An example can significantly shed some light on this subject. Several years ago, I decided to give one thousand dollars to Mahak charity in order to open up a small restaurant for its members who have basic information about cooking. After several months, I found that the restaurant has become a well-known place for all juveniles and adults and its income was around ten thousand dollars in a month. Consequently, I preferred to go there and closely see what they are doing. I realized that they called up around forty persons more form that charity to work there.
Moreover, one of the most paramount and momentous points of opening up a new business for poor people is that they will be motivated and stimulated to find the best ways to quit from the current situation and earn much more money. In such a situation, they will be full of energy and motivation to use the obtained opportunity positively and improve their life quality in the near future. Therefore, perhaps this motivation leads to the creation of some other opportunities such as building hospitals or the construction of a complex. An example can drive this notion and opinion strikingly home. In the aforementioned example, after several years, the head of the restaurant would be encouraged to build a huge hospital with lots of amenities for the members of that charity. This is because he earned much money from his work and had a great saving. Thus, this issue helped some other people to have a better life in the future.
In conclusion, taking into account the aforementioned reasons and examples, I am of opinion that giving money to a charity to open up a new business for needy persons is a better idea in comparison to provide food, medical care, and housing for them. This is because they are incited to create several job opportunities for other poor individuals and also they are able to earn enough money to construct a hospital or restaurant for them.
- TOEFL T P O 31 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- Do you agree or disagree？ It is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise. Explain your answer with examples and specific reasons. 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to read or watch the news presented by people whose views are similar to your own than by people whose views are different from yours. 73
- You have long been friends with someone. If they do something that you don’t like, should you still be friends with him or her? 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 440, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ruct a hospital or restaurant for them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2791.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 572.0 407.700716846 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87937062937 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89045207381 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81074247144 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479020979021 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 900.0 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.008612842 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.904761905 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2380952381 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128485886042 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396178325375 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358148055838 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876293634075 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00966248197875 0.0645574589148 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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