There is a great controversial debate in most colleges towards allocation of financial resources. This has been a lingering issue for decades. While an overwhelming majority supports that the university should fully support classes and libraries as it is the primary purpose of the college, others may take an opposing view. I, definitely subscribe that colleges should equally distribute financial resources to both classes and sports and social activities.
The first reason is that students can create an academic-life balance. It is undoubtedly to dismiss the immense necessity of sports and social activities in the lives of students. These extra-curricular activities create a great opportunity for students to perform excellently in academics, increase their social relationships among students and even among their teachers,to mention but not the least, it invariably reduces stress and depression. A noteworthy recent survey conducted at the University of Washington on the relevance of sports and its effects on students' academic performance. The result depicted a remarkable and phenomenal performance in students who enrolled in one sports activities or the other. Hence, the results stemming from this reliable research compelled the university administration to create an avenue for students to participate in wide range of sports.
Secondly, students who engage in sports or social activities can discover their talents out of serendipity. Although, this may not sound plausible, it is irrefutably true. Some students have discovered their talents while engaging in some sports or social activity. My own experience is a compelling example. Back in my school days, I had a roommate who was actively engaged with the college basketball. He became enthusiastic and developed great and indomitable skills. This propelled him to join other basketball teams outside of the college. Shortly after college, he joined the Lakers team of Los Angeles in the National basketball Association(NBA). He was recognized by the NBA as the most unbeatable, tactful and defensive player for years.
In conclusion, based on the aforementioned reasons stated above, it is absolutely paramount that universities should financially support sports and other social activities as same as classes and libraries due to the highly indispensable value of these activities in students life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2036.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.65555555556 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18879210074 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569444444444 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.1283414957 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.8 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18414739719 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519429773385 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615800328721 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135190104213 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062847523627 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 58.1214874552 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.25 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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