TPO-04 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by tonygrey on Sat, 07/09/2016 - 17:36

ut in some of the undeveloped countries the opposite is likely to happen.

The scientific advancements in the developed countries are in a rapid rate. It is possible that they might invent a new mode of transportation and all the people will be using it. On the other hand, undeveloped countries who lacks the money to buy the new technology will continue to use cheaply available cars. We can observe effect of undeveloped countries using the technology of past in most of the poor nations. For example, some of the African countries still use bullock cart as a means of transportation as it is cheaper. However, if the people are will share technology this problem will not happen and the usage of cars will reduce uniformly around the globe.

In addition to that, the oil price is rising daily similarly air pollution due to cars are also in rise. It is likely that cars become costly to use or people may become more environmentally conscious. Either the case, it may result in people depending more public transport or environmentally friendly transport as most the cars produced runs on oil and the electric car technology is not a reliable solution. So usage of cars might decrease in the future.

However, there is chance that usage of cars might increase in the future due to population increase. The population of the world is increasing day by day and the prices of making cars are decreasing day by day due to advancement in technology in the car production. So as a result more people can afford a car in the future that the present. The rate of population increase is more on the undeveloped countries than developed countries. So there is chance that in future their might more cars in use that today.

In short we can say that, cars likely to get cheaper in the future and more people are likely to buy it but the oil prices and air pollution caused by these cars can make people deter from using the cars. In addition to that, there is high chance that new modes transportation will develop and people will use those more.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nt in technology in the car production. So as a result more people can afford a car i...
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...ars. In addition to that, there is high chance that new modes transportation will deve...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'similarly', 'so', 'still', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in short', 'as a result', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.250645994832 0.229887763892 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.134366925065 0.158761421928 85% => OK
Adjectives: 0.108527131783 0.0866891130778 125% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0490956072351 0.046263068375 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0258397932817 0.0685040099705 38% => OK
Prepositions: 0.136950904393 0.118717715034 115% => OK
Participles: 0.0232558139535 0.0351676179071 66% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.7242552646 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0284237726098 0.0309702414327 92% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.113695090439 0.0887237588012 128% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0439276485788 0.0209618222197 210% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.00258397932817 0.0139019557991 19% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2049.0 2387.08602151 86% => OK
No of words: 361.0 408.028673835 88% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67590027701 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48200974243 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.301939058172 0.338922669872 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.193905817175 0.251872472559 77% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.168975069252 0.174417080927 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.119113573407 0.112833075102 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7242552646 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.415512465374 0.524397521467 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 42.3629191832 59.2087087015 72% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0555555556 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4293530472 48.84282405 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.833333333 120.699889404 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0555555556 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.722222222222 0.644075263715 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 39.446137273 45.7405998639 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.96296296296 1.45489161554 135% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265324658736 0.300154397459 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.142352738384 0.103427244359 138% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0811720772336 0.0752933317313 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.595473193775 0.497263757937 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.141467356971 0.151897553556 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126744596653 0.114077575197 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046990778107 0.0781384742642 60% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.463711956998 0.336927656856 138% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0406456636089 0.067059652881 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190461218894 0.210909579961 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040499685366 0.0618886996521 65% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8870967742 50% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.91756272401 183% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 9.0 2.75985663082 326% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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