One of the serious issues human benings are now facing is pollution and environmental problems. Some believe that there will be more cars in twenty years later. Others, on the other hand, have the oposite viewpoint, believing that there will be fewer automibles in the streets in the near future. I am of the latter openion, supporting that because of the effect of technology and the associated environmental issues.
To start with, technology has resulted in producing advanced automobiles and airplanes, and online communication softwares which has been reduced the number of cars required since 50 years ago. Nowadays, there are an increase trend in using airplanes as a means of transport. Even for short distances such as 200 killometers, people prefer to commute by airplane compared the lenghty use of cars. Moving by airplane is more comfortable and time-saving compared to automobiles. Furthermore, Internet and advanced online communication softwares, such as Skype, have eased communication and have caused a reduction of unnecessary face-to-face meetings. This has gone a long way towards reduction of automobiles in streets. The trend which will be continued for twenty years laters. Another important factor, is a change in the style of jobs in the future compared to now. In twenty years, it is estimated that most of jobs will be done online and it is not required for the employees to be present at their workplace. Instead, they will enjoy sitting in their cossy houses and perform their work by their laptops. This trend currently can also be seen in some field such as survey engineers who designed their plan at their home. As all these explanations shows, technology will contribute to a decrease in number of cars in street in the near future.
In addition, our beautiful Earth is now facing some environmental issues which one of the solutions will be reducing number of cars. According to the scientific researches, one of the elements has contributed to the global warming is methane which is the emmission gas from cars. The global warming has caused an increase in oceans' temperature and the globe which will melt the polar ices and consequently will cause the catastrophic events such as flooding, saunami and having unresistance hot temperatures. Therefore, governments want to enforce more restrictions on using private cars and would encourage people to commute by public transportations. Through subsidies and providing free or very cheap public transportaion, citizens are convinced to use buses to reduce their carbon foot print which will reduce the particulate matters. This policy will go a long way towards reducing the number of cars, resulting a reduction of air pollution in the future. Accordingly, there was an internation seminar in Paris in 2015 where all of political leader were gathered to address the global warming issue. This kind of meeting will help towards reducing number of private cars.
In conclusion, I personally think that in twenty years there will be fewer private vehicles and more public transport systems attributed to the advance technology and environmental problems. Internet and online communication programs will decrease the cars in the streets. This trend will be encouraged by governments by funding public transpot systems.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'trends'?
Suggestion: trends
...rs ago. Nowadays, there are an increase trend in using airplanes as a means of transp...
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Line 3, column 908, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the jobs') or simply say ''most jobs''.
Suggestion: most of the jobs; most jobs
.... In twenty years, it is estimated that most of jobs will be done online and it is not requi...
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Line 5, column 478, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nts such as flooding, saunami and having unresistance hot temperatures. Therefore...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2782.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 528.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26893939394 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95291087263 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488636363636 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 867.6 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0000311759 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.037037037 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.48148148148 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152857262425 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047507715974 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481016640231 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114552750013 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312890433071 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 86.8835125448 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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