TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

Every personal needs some activities for their personal enjoyment to relieve stress and increase their productivity. But these days people spend too much time on their personal enjoyment and are not doing the things they should be actually doing. It is really important in today's busy lives, that every person must prioritize his activities, and utilize his time wisely.

Kids are the ones who are suffering most because of their parent's priority for their own activities over their kids. In fact, some people are so busy enjoying their lives that keep postponing having their own kids. This, in turn, increases the risks of complications during the pregnancy and health of the newborn. It is scientifically proved that mental illness is more common in kids who were born to a mother after their forties.

Further, lack of time by parents exposes a child to activities which are inappropriate for their age. Kid are involved in illegal activities due to lack of guidance by their parents. The suicide rate in the teens is also increasing these days.

I firmly believe that any individual's priority should be his family, health, and work. But, in actual, everybody is so busy in pursuing their personal interests that they don't devote proper time to their family and work. The kids these days are busy updating their lives on social media so much that they ignore and suffer in their studies. Availability of fast food to satisfy their tongue further restricts them from remaining healthy. Kids spend so much time on their video games that they don't take out time to hit the gym or go for a walk.

In conclusion, I can say that "excess of everything is bad". So everyone should enjoy each and every moment of their lives but it is must for them to realise to prioritise their activities and work towards them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 27, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...hese days. I firmly believe that any individuals priority should be his family, health, ...
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Line 7, column 172, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...uing their personal interests that they dont devote proper time to their family and ...
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Line 7, column 494, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...uch time on their video games that they dont take out time to hit the gym or go for ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, really, so, in conclusion, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1521.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9064516129 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52756911264 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538709677419 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.6417870106 48.9658058833 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.4705882353 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2352941176 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47058823529 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121130461423 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0474702876015 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.091547877799 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0760267674459 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0892403065039 0.0645574589148 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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