TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

People usually spend a lot of time enjoying for themselves and not to bother the surroundings, this usually ends in poor relationship with family and even with the society . The main reason being the use of communication devices .

I agree to the above statement because, I see a lot of people immerse themselves into these particulars smartphones wh h are easily accessible for communication and the problem starts with the internet being handy. These cause the person to lose a good contact and even a good reputation at every stage.

In olden days, get togethers are the main source to keep people connected and updated. This often use to make people stay joyful and. Even much healthier . People now a days like to be alone and spend time alone watching tv, using internet and are move active on social networking sites. They are even living a more sedentary lifestyle which later in life causing trouble and Ill health
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In conclusion, I would say the people are loosing their jobs and good name at everyplace they go just because of their irresponsible behavior and avoiding the world around them.Hence, facing a failure all the time.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, so, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 43.0788530466 32% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 52.1666666667 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 957.0 1977.66487455 48% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 194.0 407.700716846 48% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93298969072 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 4.48103885553 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70135930745 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 212.727598566 58% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.634020618557 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 306.9 618.680645161 50% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.809644344 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119602951361 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0426263754434 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0210688768495 0.0737576698707 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0692187353064 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0174311805395 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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