The invention of television prompted a now kind of advertisement- TV advertisement, and the myriad of advertisement focused towards several ages group have mostly engendered a positive outcome. However, the advertisement related to kids, some people believe, have an deleterious effect and should be banned. In contrast, in my opinion, due to of various reasons, it should be persuaded .
First, Advertisement of elemental needs of children- food, cloth, health product- will ease parents to get their necessities easily. for instance, When my sister in law, in kathmandu, gave birth to first child, it was onerous to find the product related to children. In additional, it was further difficult to know every specific terms of child product, place it is located, and quality of product. However, seven years later, when my elder sister gave birth in pokhara, It was so facile and the reason of it was an advertisement. During the seven years period of time, there was a lot of advertisement, which aids me and my sister to get an early apprise of primary product, before the child birth along with their higher quality brand, location and terms.
Second,what about the advertisement provided by goverment for the health benefit of mother and kids?. In Nepal, being a undeveloped country, most of people are uneducated, leading the death of the people due to some common reason(diarrhea, dysentery, Common cold). because the early stage for mother and child is always vulnerable to disease, the government of Nepal have advertised various safety measures aids. Further, this advertisement have shown promising outcome.
Third, The advertisement of junk food can have deleterious effect and should be banned; however, the aids of salubrious meal can have wholesome effect on child. for example, my sister child always used to niggle for drinking milk when see was three years old. However, when she saw the aids of one of the milk products, she was absorbed by it and thereafter, she drank with a great excitement.
Since, most of children focused advertisement can have auspicious effect; thus, We have to uplift it by focusing on a healthy measure that can have benefical effect but also limits the factor which can bring negative consequences.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, third, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in contrast, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1897.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21153846154 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9242260116 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549450549451 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 4.0 0.994623655914 402% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3454673485 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.5625 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1875 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0980974248336 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372204952456 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0269813673675 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0603238411144 0.150856017488 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041455625507 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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