TPO-08 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In today's modern world the advertisements has great influence on the people regardless of age, from one year baby to seventy five years old adults. It has both positive and negatives effects on us. Nowadays we are so addicted to the this ad. Further, it has very good impact on the children age around two to five years. Among the good and bad effect of its, negative consequences are more than positive one. So I would like support the statements which says that we are supposed to not allow the kids to see advertisements.

First of all, I want to explore the negative impact of advertisements on small kids, For example, one of my friend's kid started watching the TV show which displayed moods condom advertisement and that kid started asking his parents what's that, his age around four years. Do you think is it age for explain about them?. In fact no, the parents are so much embarrassed at the time. These kind of circumstances can be avoided only through restricting these kind ad from the children.

Secondly, regarding violent and wild advertisements, today more number of channels shows these events in order to get high rate in their field but kids spoiling by seeing these kinds pictures. For example, near to my flat there is one friends and he has five years old boy who is so naughty. After seeing one wild advertisement in that picture one baby taken the gun to get the chocolate from other kids and this did the same with his father's loaded rifle it was very terrible thing. If this should occur in the society thee we are parents restrict the kid see some advertisements.

Thirdly, some kids become adman by seeing the advertisements, for example, when the seeing the remote cars in the tv shows then force the parents to get that particular things regardless financial status of their parents, still, I remember that when I was young some around five years old, I forced my parents to get remote aeroplane even though it cost around 1000 rupees which they cannot afford that this happended because I saw that in one advertisement and broken it within three days. Some advertisements has good effect on the kids like magic slide for doing the home work, toys for animals name, bike advertisements for learning new activities and colourful book advertisement which describes about the science picture, map and important political leaders. but most of advertisements are more commercial nowadays.

Finally, even though fewer advantages are there in the advertisements, still, it has more negative effects than positive effects. So in order protect the child become violent, terror, to prevent from the bad things and to avoid the embarrassing situations. Parents we are supposed to exercise some restriction on advertisements channel so that we can make our child more productive in future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n todays modern world the advertisements has great influence on the people regard...
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Line 1, column 231, Rule ID: DT_DT[2]
Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
...s on us. Nowadays we are so addicted to the this ad. Further, it has very good impact on...
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Line 4, column 166, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'moods'' or 'mood's'?
Suggestion: moods'; mood's
...ed watching the TV show which displayed moods condom advertisement and that kid start...
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Line 4, column 233, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...and that kid started asking his parents whats that, his age around four years. Do you...
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Line 4, column 381, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...ts are so much embarrassed at the time. These kind of circumstances can be avoided only t...
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Line 4, column 408, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...at the time. These kind of circumstances can be avoided only through restricting ...
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Line 6, column 251, Rule ID: HAVE_CD_YEARS[1]
Message: This phrase is used with 'be': 'is five years old'.
Suggestion: is five years old
... to my flat there is one friends and he has five years old boy who is so naughty. After seeing one...
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Line 6, column 485, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...oaded rifle it was very terrible thing. If this should occur in the society thee w...
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Line 8, column 102, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... for example, when the seeing the remote cars in the tv shows then force the pare...
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...orced my parents to get remote aeroplane even though it cost around 1000 rupees w...
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Line 8, column 514, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'have', 'haven'.
Suggestion: have; haven
... within three days. Some advertisements has good effect on the kids like magic slid...
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Line 8, column 693, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...s and colourful book advertisement which describes about the science picture, map...
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Line 8, column 769, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: But
...e, map and important political leaders. but most of advertisements are more commerc...
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Line 8, column 773, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the advertisements') or simply say ''most advertisements''.
Suggestion: most of the advertisements; most advertisements
...ap and important political leaders. but most of advertisements are more commercial nowadays. Finall...
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... Finally, even though fewer advantages are there in the advertisements, still, ...
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Line 10, column 384, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...t we can make our child more productive in future.
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Line 10, column 395, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ke our child more productive in future.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'regarding', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'third', 'thirdly', 'for example', 'in fact', 'kind of', 'first of all']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.246183206107 0.229887763892 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.146946564885 0.158761421928 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.087786259542 0.0866891130778 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0496183206107 0.046263068375 107% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0629770992366 0.0685040099705 92% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129770992366 0.118717715034 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0343511450382 0.0351676179071 98% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.78875486221 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0267175572519 0.0309702414327 86% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.087786259542 0.0887237588012 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00954198473282 0.0209618222197 46% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.013358778626 0.0139019557991 96% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2827.0 2387.08602151 118% => OK
No of words: 477.0 408.028673835 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.92662473795 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.314465408805 0.338922669872 93% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.22641509434 0.251872472559 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.16142557652 0.174417080927 93% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0964360587002 0.112833075102 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78875486221 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517819706499 0.524397521467 99% => OK
Word variations: 60.8293049208 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.85 20.5533526081 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 104.074540595 48.84282405 213% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 141.35 120.699889404 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.85 20.5533526081 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8 0.644075263715 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.54480286738 307% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 46.491509434 45.7405998639 102% => OK
Elegance: 1.58088235294 1.45489161554 109% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166899906168 0.300154397459 56% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0811624364294 0.103427244359 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0533227600073 0.0752933317313 71% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.488503208086 0.497263757937 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.1541850224 0.151897553556 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691533908632 0.114077575197 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410413452356 0.0781384742642 53% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.368333479738 0.336927656856 109% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0414378174172 0.067059652881 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117756975941 0.210909579961 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303560772992 0.0618886996521 49% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8870967742 59% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.86379928315 259% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 8.42114695341 59% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 2.4623655914 325% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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