TPO-09 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Over the last few years, using technology by children has changed their lifestyle and effect on their mind and brain. This that whether technology has made children less creative than children were in the past has been at the center of a global debate. Some people are of the belief that new technology has reduced children's creativeness while others contradict with this opinion. However, I am of the opinion that technology could decrease creativeness in today children.

One important reason behind this issue is that technology provides children with a wide range of facilities and they have an easy access to them. It means that a child has almost everything without any effort and thought. For instance, today children have a computer or laptop in their room and install many games on it. Therefore, they do not have any creativeness to create a new game. However, in the past, we did not have a computer with many games on it, thus, we had to use any things around us to make a new toy and use it. I remember that I made a beautiful dull with wood and cotton, everyday thought who I can make it better. Consequently, I was always thinking about my dull and it absolutely improved my mind and helped me to be a creative person.

Moreover, I do believe that technology has made anything convenience and easy for children, they do not need to try for solve their problems. As an illustration of this, consider the following example. Today children can connect easily to the Internet and find all kinds of information with a click. when their teacher wants them to think and find a great solution for a difficult question in the biology course, children never strive to be creative and solve the question by themselves, they immediately turn on their computer and start to surf the Internet, then download and copy the correct answer and give it to their teacher. However, in the past, we did not have access to the Internet and had to solve any question by thinking. We gathered with our friends, shared our ideas, and finally found a solution creatively.

Essentially, although technology brings many advantages for children, it causes that they become less creative that they were in the past. From my vantage point, it is necessary that we educate our children how to use technology to help them improve their mind and brain creatively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'easy access'.
Suggestion: easy access
... wide range of facilities and they have an easy access to them. It means that a child has almo...
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Line 5, column 301, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
... all kinds of information with a click. when their teacher wants them to think and f...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1949.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80049261084 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64797112405 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504926108374 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8094303929 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.578947368 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3684210526 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259824098202 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856365312619 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662249838985 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178029029539 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447618623744 0.0645574589148 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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