Many people would argue that the new technological advancements has made young ones more smart than they were in the past. However, I disagree to this by claiming that nowadays children are less creative and involved as they were in the past which is elaborated in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, today children are always in front of television consoles and games. They enjoy watching cartoon channels than going out to play with friends. In addition, there are a lot of video games being popularized through advertisements slowly the kids are addicted to that. In the past the children would go to play outdoor games with friends as such friendship existed between them and where closely bonded. Nowadays the situation is different they are more bonded to electronic devices.
Secondly, the technology has made everything reachable in their finger tips. For instance,the online food services has made anything available at any time. Therefore the combined effect of television and fast food has made children more obese due to their sedentary lifestyle. As a result there is a lot of children suffering from childhood diabetes. Traditionally the children where not tightly bound to video games they would go out side have meetups and had more social connections due to the lack of options. This enhanced their mental as well as physical development.
Furthermore, today internet answers an overwhelming amount of information to kids that they are in a dilemma. Besides, they cannot differentiate between the right and wrong. Soon they have a tendency to watch porn sites and engage in drug activities. This has tremendously caused issues among the teens. However, in the past there were no much sources to go in the wrong direction. Nowadays there are a lot of sources and adults are not aware of them because it is hidden. Likewise, always children are the easy prey and unknowingly they fall into the pitches of internet.
To conclude, the technology has made the life easy and comfortable to all of us. Yet, the children need to use it prudently or else they might have to suffer its inadvertent effects. Adults can monitor their activities and make sure that they are not abused.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 90, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...hable in their finger tips. For instance,the online food services has made anything ...
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Line 5, column 157, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...as made anything available at any time. Therefore the combined effect of television and f...
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Line 5, column 278, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...obese due to their sedentary lifestyle. As a result there is a lot of children suf...
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Line 5, column 432, Rule ID: OUT_SIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'outside'?
Suggestion: outside
...htly bound to video games they would go out side have meetups and had more social connec...
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Line 7, column 337, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... teens. However, in the past there were no much sources to go in the wrong directi...
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Line 7, column 340, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ens. However, in the past there were no much sources to go in the wrong direction. N...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07162534435 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75031863491 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553719008264 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.2690518673 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.0434782609 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7826086957 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52173913043 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229271732619 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582180632371 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533185134767 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136031113474 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731538224492 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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