The children from the current generation are very fast and more creative because of the advancing technology. The modern schools are started using the computers and the projectors to teach students; such a transformation from the traditional black board classes to modern teaching support students to think . Some people believe that the automation impact on the children’s . And others prospective computerization open the student’s brain to think . As per as my concern, I don’t believe technology inhibit the children talent. because it help to improve their knowledge and make students more innovative.
First, using technology toddlers can learn more. Now we all are choosing techno-schools to our children’s because, it is our trust on technology. Also to that, most of the schools now started to give small projects as home work for kids encourage them to use technology to solve the problem. What more, they are starting technology to improve their knowledge and wisdom. Here I am using my personal experience as proof. Recently, my computer was crashed and I was trying to use different sources to store my date. My uncle son, six years young child suggest me to use I cloud. I was surprised because at that age I even don’t know how to open computer. This example illustrates the importance of technology.
In addition to enhance their intelligence, technology support children’s to think because it provides variety of resources. Now the people started to play video games and watching programs in the television. Although few times it is not good for them, overall it helps them to think . When a children playing video game, they compete with the well proved game to win and that create the logical thinking. Furthermore, when we are toddlers, we are having the limited sources to learn subject. Since, the technology is growing up; plenty of resources for kids in the online sources help to improve their skills. For example, when I was a kid I studies using paperback text books, they are not updated as a results I don’t know have the updated knowledge and we all think in the same way because of lack of resources.
In sum, advanced technology always keep children’s updated and innovative
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, so, well, for example, in addition, as a result, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1890.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16393442623 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02442455695 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535519125683 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.8067973136 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.1739130435 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9130434783 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08695652174 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119505458675 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0371707930233 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0279667129862 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0778268745675 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00990718186236 0.0645574589148 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.