TPO-13 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Not surprisingly, the most conspicuous trend in the 20th century is population mobility. As current society has undergone lots of advances in different aspects of lives, there is perception that family extension has paled its significance compared to the previous generations. While I believe it cannot generalized to all cases, I tend to agree on such a view based on the following concerns.

Firstly, it should be noted that people's lifestyle has changed drastically over the last decades. In fact, some implications such as increased rate of unemployment or geographic catastrophe like flood and earthquake have caused people to leave their motherlands in hope to find a better habitat. In the past, for example, since families' economic had strong dependence on its members, they were regarded as laborers to work in farms corporately. However, with the advent of technology especially in industrial terms, most employers have caught the rural resident's eyes to follow their own personal life without being dependent on their own families. Hence, living solely has become more common among people.

In addition, thanks to invention of high-tech facilitator's, most people have shown a tendency to pursue more convenient or take less responsibility. In the past, the members of extended family had to be responsible for onerous and difficult responsibilities like taking care of other little siblings. However, this situation has been subjected to the considerable changes as they soon have realized that living in contracted family is much easier. For example, one with only the responsibility of a child is concerned much less compared to multiple child-care.

On the other hand, if family extension remained as an essential part of social infrastructure, some problem would spontaneously be solved. Those full-time employees with childcare responsibility have to take their children to kindergarten, but if they live with their grandparents or aunts, family's norms can better be taught. Furthermore, self-dependent way of life has brought loneliness and depression. Meanwhile living in extended family is known as the most effective way to these problems.

From what have been discussed, people have less inclination to be in large families. As it was mentioned, development in industrial aspect of life and change in the way of family income support this trend. Nonetheless, large family has its own redeeming feature.

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Line 7, column 407, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Meanwhile,
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'while', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'such as', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.244655581948 0.229887763892 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.166270783848 0.158761421928 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.111638954869 0.0866891130778 129% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0570071258907 0.046263068375 123% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0403800475059 0.0685040099705 59% => OK
Prepositions: 0.137767220903 0.118717715034 116% => OK
Participles: 0.0641330166271 0.0351676179071 182% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 3.14283425338 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0380047505938 0.0309702414327 123% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0641330166271 0.0887237588012 72% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00950118764846 0.0209618222197 45% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00237529691211 0.0139019557991 17% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2437.0 2387.08602151 102% => OK
No of words: 377.0 408.028673835 92% => OK
Chars per words: 6.46419098143 5.86048508987 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.413793103448 0.338922669872 122% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.310344827586 0.251872472559 123% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.259946949602 0.174417080927 149% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.193633952255 0.112833075102 172% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14283425338 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596816976127 0.524397521467 114% => OK
Word variations: 71.1063986883 59.2087087015 120% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.8421052632 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4096393419 48.84282405 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.263157895 120.699889404 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8421052632 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.789473684211 0.644075263715 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 50.8765880218 45.7405998639 111% => OK
Elegance: 1.69369369369 1.45489161554 116% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298324853409 0.300154397459 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0540922615466 0.103427244359 52% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0345114222324 0.0752933317313 46% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.475120558779 0.497263757937 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.115267874861 0.151897553556 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107825672934 0.114077575197 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559391691435 0.0781384742642 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.307773189639 0.336927656856 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0486210163206 0.067059652881 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199617112654 0.210909579961 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238194724189 0.0618886996521 38% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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