The human life has changed over years and this change has affected the personal contexts of lives. In the past, the extended family used to be a significant aspect of people's life. However, I believe that the importance of such family has faded in present years.
To begin with, the advent of civilization and the expansion of cities have led to long distances between each city areas. This feature decreased the possibility of relatives to live closely together. My parents' experience is a good example of this. During 1980s, when they were children, they lived in the downtown of Tabriz city in a compact region where their grandparents as well as aunts and uncles were all in an accessible distance of them. Thus, they spend a great amount of time with their cousins and close relatives. A few years later, Tabriz started to extend in each pole of it, the east side of it expanded toward Tehran and the west side became closer to Marand city. As the result, nowadays, we are living so far away from my aunts and grandparents and it takes one to two hour to reach them in a relatively non-crowded day. That's because we even do not know some of new members of our great extended family.
Second, in today's life, the more emphasis of the communities is on individuality. People prefer to make their own decisions by learning from their mistakes instead of consulting with relatives. For instance, I remember watching a movie named God father. This classic movie was based on a relatively true life of an Italian family lived in United States about sixty years ago. In this movie, all the members of a huge family including grandparents and their offspring and grandchildren lived in a common palace. Therefore, in a such environment, they had to talk about every small detail of their decisions with the older family members. In contrast, currently, the children learnt to be more independent and prefer not the engage even their own parents in their future plans and are consequently became more individualized.
In conclusion, I am of the conviction that people do not prioritize the extended families of their own in recent lives. That's because of the expansion of city areas and the significance of individuality in today's life.
- TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- TPO-13 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- TPO-06 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo 90
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 250, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'During the 1980s'.
Suggestion: During the 1980s
...s experience is a good example of this. During 1980s, when they were children, they lived in...
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Line 2, column 789, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'hour' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'hours'.
Suggestion: hours
...nd grandparents and it takes one to two hour to reach them in a relatively non-crowd...
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Line 2, column 841, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...h them in a relatively non-crowded day. Thats because we even do not know some of new...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...t to be more independent and prefer not the engage even their own parents in their future ...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...their future plans and are consequently became more individualized. In conclusion, I ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
... families of their own in recent lives. Thats because of the expansion of city areas ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84334203655 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73643194191 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556135770235 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1439650521 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.75 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.15 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0939257142845 0.236089414692 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0299211001264 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0291431673447 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0634447612375 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0131926718205 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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