There is no doubt that, nowadays, traveling to a new country is an enjoyable thing. some people prefer to travel in a group with a tour guide, while others, involving myself, find it more interesting to discover the places by themselves. I feel this way for the following reasons.
To begin with, traveling without guidance is more convenient. while it is true that he knows the country better, and can help us to go to the popular areas of the country, Nowadays, the internet enables everyone to search about the country he intended to visit it before he goes. So, he can collect all the information he needs, moreover, he can rent the hotel before he arrives in the country. Thus, there is no need to hire a tour guidance. For instance, Last year I decided to decide to travel to Malaysia with my best friend, so, we made an exclusive research about the important landmarles and the most famous place, Furthermore, we read about the prices of every thing including the internal tribs. So, was ready, and we go there it was exactly similar to what we read about. that help us to explore the country through organising our schedual in a way that fit us. However, five years ago we travelled in a group to Italy which was had a guide, I remember that we didi not enjoy the trip because the schedual was not comfortable for us. Moreover, the smartphones have navigation systems that enable the person to identify direction to any place around the globe. Thus, have you had an internet connection, the probability that you would get lost is extremely far.
Secondly, we can be more involved in the culture and tradition of the place. because we are not in hurry to follow the group. then we can spend the time we wand talking to the local citizen and listening to their interesting stories. Moreover, that help us to make more friends from different countries and diverse backgrounds. Foer instanse, in that trip to Malaysia, we had time to discover different Islands like Langkawi where I found one of the amazing people I ever met, we still connected until now and they came to visit me in Sudan. Thus travelling without a mentor is more exciting.
In conclusion, nowadays with advance technology person can get information about any place in the world, so, the need for guid during the tourism considerably declines.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, no doubt, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7199017199 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60774902309 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540540540541 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7599384715 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.05 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.35 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0959712282774 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0369276335551 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390256204819 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0689805733175 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521932622646 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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