TPO-16 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

One of the Iranian sage, whose name eludes me at a moment, states that if you want to increase your brain ability, there is no better way to explore different regions of the world. Considering this, one can realize the importance of traveling in a human life. But not all kind of travels is as beneficial as others. In my perspective, if we want to fully exploit the advantage of traveling, it is not rational to go places with those ridiculous groups led by a tour guide. In this way, traveling not only would be more pleasant, but also it is more miserly, especially in expensive spots in the world like Tokyo, Singapore, Paris, London and so forth.

One reason that I believe this, is that independent traveling can lead to improvements in one's personality. Visiting new places is not at all means that one should be just relaxed, eat, sleep and sometimes go to dull malls! I, personally, prefer to meet with local people, try to communicate with them, understand their worldview because it gains me a lot of joy. Above of all, this gives me feeling of freedom. And it can be perceived that all of the mention effects would make me stronger, more thoughtful and patient. However, none of the advantages that just mentioned, would be provided by those stupid tours which are design merely for comfort lovers!

Another reason I think this way is that many of these agencies cost a lot of fortune for their services. This is because they need to hire tour leader, book the hotel and airplane ticket, and also their obtain their profits. It is obvious that they do not carry out these tasks sorely for a grace of God. Therefore, astronomical expenses for a tour which is proposed by traveling agency is not an appropriate decision for people like me that are on a budget. On the other hand, if you plan to travel on your own, the expenses would dramatically decrease. you just need to buy a ticket and a slight sum of money. once can stay at a local hotel and eat the food that other people who live the place eat. It is more sensible.

For all the reasons that I have stated, I strongly assume that no one in his or her proper mind will choose to visit places in those stupid groups. Thanks to the economic cost of independent traveling which has enabled each member of the society to travel, today, humankind can get familiar with one another and also learn a lot of materials from each other. Plus, this probably could help to reach the peace between nations across the globe.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 91, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...t traveling can lead to improvements in ones personality. Visiting new places is not...
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Line 3, column 442, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...f freedom. And it can be perceived that all of the mention effects would make me stronger,...
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Line 5, column 556, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: You
...e expenses would dramatically decrease. you just need to buy a ticket and a slight ...
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Line 5, column 613, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Once
...buy a ticket and a slight sum of money. once can stay at a local hotel and eat the f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, i think, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57046979866 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48263088287 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552572706935 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1139610381 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.15 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.35 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149954871787 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0437087140888 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0360899370582 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0928501913017 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329479843798 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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