TPO-17 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
These days, we have many choices to buy so companies have to put much effort to attract consumers. In my opinion, advertisement is one of the best ways because thanks to them, consumers think that products are much better than they really are. I have three reasons to support my idea.
The first reason is consumers pay not too much attention to the cost of products in advertisements. The main content of the advertisement is the appeal of merchandise so the cost of it is not emphasized. For example, when something is advertised in the TV program, the cost is stated at the end of the show. People are not likely to change their decision to buy if they know the cost after they decide.
The second reason is advertisements can provide customers with many good points of the goods. Therefore, they think the advantages to buy the products overweigh the disadvantages. For instance, when I was a freshman, I got a flyer that advertised a new watch. There were many functions of it, such as adjusting the time automatically and casting light. Eventually, I bought the one, but after the purchase, I learned that it didn't show the date.
The third reason is many colors used in advertisements make consumers want to buy the products. Colors have a large impact on a person's action. Let me introduce an example of this. According to the professor who majors in the function of colors, if people see red color, they want to pay money for something. Companies use such functions of colors effectively in their advertisements. As a result, consumers think that they should buy the products by seeing advertisements.
As I stated above, advertisements play an important role to make the products more attractive. I strongly stand by my opinion that most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: didn't
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Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, so, therefore, third, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86538461538 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98632649866 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525641025641 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.300988123 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.9 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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