TPO 18. Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Agree/ disagree?

Nobody doubts that traveling one of the most entertainment activities that we can do in our lives. Many individuals argue that traveling in our own contries is much more valuable than traveling to foreign contries; others disagree. In my point of view, I belive that traviling overseas and going outside our habitats is more benifits for two fundamental reasons. Which I will explain in the following essay.

To begin with, we can learn much mpre new experiences from living in a different county than ours. To illustrate this idea let us consider the following example. I remember three years ago, my family and I visited our uncle's family who lived in france. This trip was great learning opportunity to me and it made it possible for me to meet new different individuals and learn new experiences that I had ever known before. Moreover, This amazing fantastic trip allowed me to expand my social network and broaden my horizons. As we can see, Traviling to a forign region is much benifitial for us.

Second, traviling outside your countay is a great opportunity to learn more about other cultures and have more enjoyable time. staying inside the same region will might not allowed you to see lots of different people and to learn about new traditions and new cuasines. For instance, last your my brother went to germany in order to participate in a conference related to young leaders. After he came back, he told us about many thing he seen in germany that did not available in our county. such subways, trains, and many other things. In additions, he told us about the most famous meals and tradition dishes in germany. However, I imagened at that time if there conference had been held in my city, my brother would not had the oppertunity to learn and experience more about germany. This experience taought me to go beyond my county when I would have a chance.

In conclusion, travilitn is one of the great and outstanding activities we can do as human. besides the experiences and a lot knowledge we learn from it, we also see different natures and cultures and learn the poitive things that they have.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, moreover, second, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79781420765 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6544331051 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524590163934 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0605191063 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0371387831202 0.236089414692 16% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0118215908154 0.076458572812 15% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0222611335281 0.0737576698707 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0238819360353 0.150856017488 16% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203451109564 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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