In general, people think that it is important for successful people to do what they know how to well. They support that without deeply doing what they know, people would not achieve anything they have. However, the notion does not reflect the stance that I hold and should be thought about in a different light. I believe that challenging new areas allows people to succeed because today’s projects require people with various knowledge of where people did not know and it also makes people be innovative.
First of all, as modern society is becoming dependent on diverse technologies, companies in the world necessitate a great deal of novel thinking as well as employees who have ability to learn new skills. This trend last for a long time from the appearance of the Internet, which change people in modern societies. Customers could not be satisfied with this trend. In business, companies require to apply a lot of technologies into their products in order to fulfilling customers. Without the fact, companies could not survive in today’s competitive world. For instance, Sony, which was one of huge electronic company in Japan, had kept their opinion that MP3 could not replace tape recorder, even the trend was changing. Most of other companies have tried to manufacture MP3 player with various technologies. Eventually, Sony was damaged in financial crisis and other companies would be success in the market. Thus, it is legitimate to say that challenging to new areas allows people to success in their life.
Moreover, the globalized world requires innovative people in order to succeed. To be specific, even applying new ideas is risky activities for people, it provides opportunities for people to upgrade themselves. In modern society, people are focus on what they have and what they have learned, when they consider something. However, it is old-fashioned thinking because they are capable to broaden their perspectives and thinking spectrums, which as a result allow them to upgrade their lives. For instance, Steve Jobs, who is the founder of Apple, made great accomplishments in his lifetime. I read online that he was successful because he was innovative and kept thinking about how to apply new technologies. Also, he thought that not trying to learn novelty is as the same as the death. As a result, this shows that challenging new is the best way for people to be successful person.
To sum up, I believe that for success, it is important for people to challenge objects and take risks because various technologies are required, and it makes them more innovative. Consequently, the importance of my views cannot be underestimated in that it can kill two birds with one stone for the reasons I have mentioned above. All in all, this trend will probably continue for the next generations.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 395, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'applying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: applying
...s trend. In business, companies require to apply a lot of technologies into their produc...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'consequently', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'for instance', 'in general', 'as a result', 'as well as', 'first of all', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.213610586011 0.229887763892 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.187145557656 0.158761421928 118% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0869565217391 0.0866891130778 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0491493383743 0.046263068375 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0642722117202 0.0685040099705 94% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12854442344 0.118717715034 108% => OK
Participles: 0.0396975425331 0.0351676179071 113% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82905657514 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0378071833648 0.0309702414327 122% => OK
Particles: 0.00189035916824 0.00188951952338 100% => OK
Determiners: 0.054820415879 0.0887237588012 62% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0170132325142 0.0209618222197 81% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0245746691871 0.0139019557991 177% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2819.0 2387.08602151 118% => OK
No of words: 465.0 408.028673835 114% => OK
Chars per words: 6.0623655914 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.359139784946 0.338922669872 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.277419354839 0.251872472559 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.187096774194 0.174417080927 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.141935483871 0.112833075102 126% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82905657514 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494623655914 0.524397521467 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 56.6047942155 59.2087087015 96% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.375 20.5533526081 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8034886453 48.84282405 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.458333333 120.699889404 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.375 20.5533526081 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.625 0.644075263715 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 47.1169354839 45.7405998639 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.27044025157 1.45489161554 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245740887407 0.300154397459 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.10412195343 0.103427244359 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0623708906284 0.0752933317313 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.446403623656 0.497263757937 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.108562743741 0.151897553556 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0910650824852 0.114077575197 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601983637836 0.0781384742642 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.370302682659 0.336927656856 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0574598309016 0.067059652881 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184979370195 0.210909579961 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637336726836 0.0618886996521 103% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.