In given article, the author assume that through replacing margarine from butter, Happy Pancake House restaurants in the southeast and northeast are expected to drastically increase their profit. However, despite the presented argument, several questions need to be answered for each of the argument to be assessed adequately.
First of all, the author assumes that most of responses from customers about 98 percent prefer to margarine than butter, whereas only 2 percent of customers does not. This report might be questionable whether how many people have involved in the survey and about the age diversity. For strengthen the assumption, these two are prepared, the percent is dependent on the sample size of respondents. Even 98 percent of customers tend to have preferences on margarine, it would not be convincing evident to support the survey if the sample size is significantly low. Moreover, in the case of the age diversity, respondents are not reliable when the diversity is focused on the specific age such as twenties. Thus, in order to bolster the survey from customers, the author might corroborate the supporting evidence pertaining to the sample size and age dependency.
Furthermore, the author presents that according to the survey, customers cannot distinguish between better and margarine. However, the author’s assumption leads readers to be questionable what evidences corroborate the assumptions would suggested in the reading passage. Unless the survey method done is fully adequate for making decision, only decision with not enough evidence and not convincing. Therefore, further proof such as plausible survey methods is necessitated to build strong connection with the conclusion that the surveyed customers cannot distinguish which food are used with butter or margarine.
Finally, in the reading passage, the assumption that the change from butter are plausible for Happy Pancake House in northeast as well as southeast, which as a result, make dramatic profits for them. The argument could not be explained clearly with the evidence in the argument. The survey is done for Happy Pancake House in southeast, not for in northeast the conclusion might become aberration. Hence, further evidence might substantiate this argument.
To sum up, in order to bolster and make more plausible, the questions mentioned above might be fulfilled.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 39, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the responses') or simply say ''most responses''.
Suggestion: most of the responses; most responses
... First of all, the author assumes that most of responses from customers about 98 percent prefer ...
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Line 3, column 242, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'suggest'
Suggestion: suggest
...ences corroborate the assumptions would suggested in the reading passage. Unless the surv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, whereas, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 366.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49180327869 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91455657537 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510928961749 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5422586998 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.235294118 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5294117647 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.58823529412 5.70786347227 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188180244003 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602930915565 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625445265886 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930639846421 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518255607585 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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