TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Success is the product of hard work, patience, and luck. Even though how hard to decide to take a risk or not, it is better to try it because the result has enormous pros after all. I agree with the trying new things and taking risks makes life more engaging to live rather than keep doing the same thing. I will explore my reasons in the following essay.

Above all, trying new things encourage a person to improve themselves and help to release the stress they had. In order to become an ideal one, people learn something new throughout their lives. Also, they do something unfamiliar to make their life funnier which helps them to forget about stress and anger. From my own experience, in school, I tried to study hard to prepare myself for the next journey of my life- a university. Moreover, I tried brand new sports or dance movements to relax and enjoy my time during my free time. Because time is irreplaceable, people prefer to live with full of memories. A success and the hobby is the vital memories of everyone.

Furthermore, taking risks have only two results- success or failure. Nevertheless, I think the result does not matter for the people because those both taught us a new crucial lesson and give a new chance. A success taught us if we try until the end without giving up, everything is possible. On the other hand, a failure gives a second chance to not repeat the mistake again and also give an opportunity to learn from our mistake. Taking a risks is not only dedicated to learning, but it also exists to make life more interesting. For example, people love watching and trying extreme sports even though how dangerous it is because it gives a great satisfaction to people. One of my friends who rides a motorcycle on a mountain, he wants to ride it again after a terrible accident which causes him to lay on a bed for almost three months.

All in all, we all live once, try to learn all thing impossible but try to learn a lot with an excitement is the target of all people. I believe that trying new things and taking risks help people to reach their goal of life, in other words, it brings them success.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 21, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a risk' or simply 'risks'?
Suggestion: a risk; risks
...es of everyone. Furthermore, taking a risks have only two results- a success or a f...
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Line 5, column 446, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a risk' or simply 'risks'?
Suggestion: a risk; risks
...unity to learn from our mistake. Taking a risks is not only dedicated to learning, but ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, after all, for example, i think, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1748.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47058823529 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41178775893 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531969309463 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.4710581328 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.55 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235682747761 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733156214292 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661589244767 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158003149331 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0692581957396 0.0645574589148 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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