TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Success has no definite rules and regulation except to work hard and to be patient. Sometimes people may have to adopt new ways and try new things; they may have to change their field or profession. But is it sure to get success by trying new things or it is not wise to take risks? Well, many people think that it is risky to try new things because there are chances that one might fail whereas I strongly believe that in order to achieve their goal it is essential to take risks and try new things for following reasons.

To, begin with, it is not certain to get success in only one specific field or from trying one particular method. Many people think that working hard is a “key to success” while trying new things has many advantages associated with it. Although, there are many great examples of people who started from doing one business but gradually they tried their hands on many different new things such as the great “Dhiru Bhai Ambani” who started from a small petrol pump and slowly he conquered almost every field. It is true that he did not get good response initially in every field of his choice, however, slowly he had attained great heights and today he is a well known businessman and comes in the list of top hundred most richest person in the world.

Though, there are people who don’t get success in one particular field, in that case it is wise to change that field and try something else. There is no certain pathway to follow to reach one’s goal, everyone is prone to do mistakes but a successful man is the one who learns from his/her mistakes and moves on. If a person has failed in a business or in some particular job then it is better to try something else. I can recall when I was working in a hospital as a Doctor; I was not able to achieve my goals. Hence, I decided to do private practice which was life changing decision for me although, it was quite risky but I did it anyway. After two years I turned out to be a very successful practitioner in my city. Therefore, I can suggest other people to take risks in life because one never knows what is written in destiny.

To sum up with, I can say that many a times we believe that we will do good in a particular thing but it is not always true. We do not know what will work for us as we all have hidden talents that will only be exposed and help us when we take risk. Also, fate plays a major role in getting success and if it’s not working in one thing, there is probability that it might work in some other new thing.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 397, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... are chances that one might fail whereas I strongly believe that in order to achi...
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Line 3, column 155, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... Many people think that working hard is a 'key to success' while trying...
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Line 3, column 374, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...but gradually they tried their hands on many different new things such as the great 'Dhir...
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Line 3, column 632, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... field of his choice, however, slowly he had attained great heights and today he ...
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Line 3, column 739, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'richest' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: richest
...an and comes in the list of top hundred most richest person in the world. Though, there a...
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Line 3, column 739, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'most the richest'.
Suggestion: most the richest
...an and comes in the list of top hundred most richest person in the world. Though, there a...
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Line 5, column 652, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...it was quite risky but I did it anyway. After two years I turned out to be a very suc...
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Line 7, column 38, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a time' or simply 'times'?
Suggestion: a time; times
... To sum up with, I can say that many a times we believe that we will do good in a pa...
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Line 7, column 408, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... it might work in some other new thing.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'anyway', 'but', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'whereas', 'while', 'such as', 'it is true', 'to sum up']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.183177570093 0.229887763892 80% => OK
Verbs: 0.198130841121 0.158761421928 125% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0934579439252 0.0866891130778 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0542056074766 0.046263068375 117% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0822429906542 0.0685040099705 120% => OK
Prepositions: 0.100934579439 0.118717715034 85% => OK
Participles: 0.0336448598131 0.0351676179071 96% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.36670643369 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0411214953271 0.0309702414327 133% => OK
Particles: 0.00560747663551 0.00188951952338 297% => OK
Determiners: 0.0467289719626 0.0887237588012 53% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.018691588785 0.0209618222197 89% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.018691588785 0.0139019557991 134% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2558.0 2387.08602151 107% => OK
No of words: 476.0 408.028673835 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37394957983 5.86048508987 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.268907563025 0.338922669872 79% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.186974789916 0.251872472559 74% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.107142857143 0.174417080927 61% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0672268907563 0.112833075102 60% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36670643369 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470588235294 0.524397521467 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 53.4530167073 59.2087087015 90% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.4444444444 20.5533526081 129% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2521227166 48.84282405 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.111111111 120.699889404 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4444444444 20.5533526081 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.888888888889 0.644075263715 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.54480286738 162% => OK
Readability: 45.141923436 45.7405998639 99% => OK
Elegance: 0.949720670391 1.45489161554 65% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255929569263 0.300154397459 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.148305080248 0.103427244359 143% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0902350005709 0.0752933317313 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.525628011888 0.497263757937 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.111346085348 0.151897553556 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10685769208 0.114077575197 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537781081993 0.0781384742642 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.354023753911 0.336927656856 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0271875968515 0.067059652881 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182288503668 0.210909579961 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0722524261172 0.0618886996521 117% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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