TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

Considering factors of success in today’s world, it is obvious that the form of works are changing rapidly and the independent individual jobs are replaced by an interrelated group working.

One of the reasons why the ability to relate well is more important than just studying hard is that reports play a pivotal role in the success of many companies, whose work is mainly based on data and information. In fact, these companies have access to a large amount of data, which has to be properly classified, analyzed and summarized in order to be used to draw conclusions from. Thus, employees’ work in most departments of these companies is associated with data which necessitates the ability to provide well-written reports. For example, consider Walmart, chain retail stores with many branches in whole Europe and the United States, whose main work is fundamentally based on data and reports on demand of various customers in different stores, their demand pattern over long periods and so forth.

Furthermore, jobs are becoming more and more interrelated with a group of people working together for a definite purpose rather than working individually. Not only the new condition does require employees to grow their team working skills, but also it makes them attend periodic meetings to report their activities to each other and chief executives of the company.

On the other hand, the superiority of studying over reporting ability reveals in the jobs for which the only important factor is individual information and skills. Computer programming is a good example in this area in which software engineers program each part of the software individually.

To sum up, I strongly assert that although studying hard is still important, the importance of reporting skill is more than studying hard since it is essential for working in a group and in companies whose job is mainly based on data.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, still, thus, well, as to, for example, in fact, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 43.0788530466 32% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1608.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18709677419 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87976181233 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561290322581 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.6629331661 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.8 100.406767564 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 20.6045352989 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8 5.45110844103 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211339712598 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0882195331253 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696123856798 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1165367751 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317633148968 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 11.7677419355 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 58.1214874552 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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