TPO-22 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by vhb on Thu, 10/13/2016 - 11:54

I certainly believe that teachers should make their social or political thinking known to children in the homeroom. Someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follows.

Firstly, it is more likely to extend pupils’ experience. All teachers gain a valuable and worthwhile knowledge during several years hard working. They try to keep pace with new advancements and improvements in different fields of transportation, communication, health caring, and even artificial intelligence. Besides, some of them are expert in social and political events like presidential election. This would be a great opportunity for children to broad their horizon or information and being prepare for future careers or responsibilities.

Furthermore, avoiding from psychology problems is another noticeable support. Because of the class difficulties and assignments, all students should feel stress and anxiety. In a class such as physic, electronic, or math talking about social and political events can give children enough free time to enjoy and relax. In addition, it can help children to discuss all hidden aspects of social events and perhaps reach to a profound understanding toward the topics and materials. This can be a key factor that enables students to cope with life’s difficulties and possibly relieve the tension or keep away the pressure.

Admittedly, there are some justifications by one who argues that if teachers speak about their opinions, they should waste students' time. Chiefly, nowadays, the world alters very quickly and any time wasting can delay or jeopardize youngsters’ success. For instance, in a computer class, the main duty of teacher is to talk about digital instruments such as smart phone or television and so any deviation from this topic cannot be acceptable. However, still I affirm that teachers should talk about their social and political thinking in a class. Although this should take some times, it can be neglected compared with the profits that it has for students. Besides, all the time loss can be compensated by leading the students toward a healthy and satisfied lifestyle.

Due to aforementioned ground, all folk should bear in mind that instructors should talk about their social or political ideas in a class. Participation of learning and healthiness are two prime and conspicuous reasons.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ward a healthy and satisfied lifestyle. Due to aforementioned ground, all folk s...
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'while', 'as for', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'such as', 'talking about']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248226950355 0.229887763892 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.130023640662 0.158761421928 82% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0921985815603 0.0866891130778 106% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0425531914894 0.046263068375 92% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0330969267139 0.0685040099705 48% => OK
Prepositions: 0.113475177305 0.118717715034 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0236406619385 0.0351676179071 67% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.09566826289 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0236406619385 0.0309702414327 76% => OK
Particles: 0.00236406619385 0.00188951952338 125% => OK
Determiners: 0.0851063829787 0.0887237588012 96% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0378250591017 0.0209618222197 180% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.00472813238771 0.0139019557991 34% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2395.0 2387.08602151 100% => OK
No of words: 371.0 408.028673835 91% => OK
Chars per words: 6.45552560647 5.86048508987 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.420485175202 0.338922669872 124% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.315363881402 0.251872472559 125% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.247978436658 0.174417080927 142% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.156334231806 0.112833075102 139% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09566826289 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579514824798 0.524397521467 111% => OK
Word variations: 67.0710597571 59.2087087015 113% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.6666666667 20.5533526081 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9321509087 48.84282405 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.047619048 120.699889404 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.5533526081 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.644075263715 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 49.2030548068 45.7405998639 108% => OK
Elegance: 1.87356321839 1.45489161554 129% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351417036625 0.300154397459 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0574289293481 0.103427244359 56% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0558541962951 0.0752933317313 74% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.461499482031 0.497263757937 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.123859261012 0.151897553556 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122194746609 0.114077575197 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710397365792 0.0781384742642 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.303249437168 0.336927656856 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0895005185292 0.067059652881 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243012377723 0.210909579961 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412871524005 0.0618886996521 67% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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for children to broad their horizon or information and being prepare for future careers or responsibilities.
for children to broad their horizon or information and prepare for future careers or responsibilities.

should feel stress and anxiety
should feel stressed and anxious

flaws:
Not exactly right on the topic. What the topic wants to say is that: teachers may mislead students by showing off the social or political views in the classroom.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 371 350
No. of Characters: 1947 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.389 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.248 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.904 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.643 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.277 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.492 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.043 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

disagree with the statement 'Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom' is not equal to 'Teachers should make their social or political views known to students in the classroom', we may say: 'Teachers making their social or political views known to students in the classroom may not create problems.'

The first reason 'it is more likely to extend pupils’ experience' is acceptable.

The second reason 'avoiding from psychology problems' is not so closely related to the topic.

The third reason 'waste time' is not exactly what the topic wants to say. We may argue something like this: somebody may say that teachers may mislead students by showing off the social or political views in the classroom. However, ....