TPO 24 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in todays world, one may face several problems in their life. So, it is necessary for every individual to be well-prepared for facing these vast amount of problems. While some people believe that it is the responsibilty of the parents to force the youngsters to take a part-time job to prepare them for the adulthood, the others hold the view that it is better for juveniles to gain their own experiences in adulthood. Personally, I concur with the former group's viewpoint. The reasons substantiating my viewpoint are explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, if one has a part-time job in their teenagehood, they force to take the responsibility of their decisions which they have made. To elaborate, it is a necessity for a variety of jobs which the person should think on their feet. So, it is an important charactristic which an individual after a while working on a field can gain. Besides, another charactristic which the youngster can gain is that they should admit the repercussion of their actions. So, by attaining this charactristic, they are very successful in their future life.
Moreover, juveniles can choose a part-time job which they are interested in. As a result, their job not only does kind of hobby for them but only learn them a variety of skills which is a required specification for their future work. To say nothing of, in today's world every employer need high skilled employer who have a lot of experiences in that field. For example, when I was a teenager my parents did not advise me to take a part-time job and now, although I have masters of the science in mechanical engineering but due to lack of experiences in this field, it is really hard for me to find a suitable job for me.
As shown above, considering all of the reasons and points mentioned above, one can conclude that it has very advantages which encourage our childeren to take a part-time job in their teenagehood. It is because, one can gain remarkable requisite charactristic for their adulthood and also gain a variety of experinces while they are doing some works which they are fond of.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: groups'; group's
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Suggestion: taking
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, moreover, really, so, well, while, for example, kind of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1774.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82065217391 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92609422442 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497282608696 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1368231619 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.875 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280860653188 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946460101764 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559162590785 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184625679064 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254293441802 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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