The parents have significant role in the preparing their children about the work. parents should start to get familiar their children about the jobs from the age of 18, they can prepare themselves to cherish the hardworking and intelligence in the workplace from the teenager period. parents should train the responsibility to their children and motivated them to hire in a part-time job. In the following essay, i would like to express my opinion in regard to the thesis ". I fully agree with the following statement. one of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job". I have lots of good reasons for this but the most important of them are:
First and foremost, workplaces help the human to amplify their good feature and prohibit that bad characteristic grow in him, moreover if they are employed in a part-time job, it helps them to prepare themselves for future career, according to the researchers, the teenager who works besides the academic education is more success in their future job, the researchers believe that, part-time jobs help the teenagers to get some fundamental expertise in the workplace, furthermore, they add some sentences to their hypothesis by telling that, part-time job helps the juvenile to have recognition about the work, also it aware them that, earning the money needs to endure the different hardships, as regard, it motivates them to be serious, responsible and accurate in their future jobs.
In the second place, the part-time jobs help the teenagers to find own correct way to be in academic environment or work environment. some teenager would not like to pursue higher education in the university and would like to be employed in a company, similarly, some teenager would like to create own business and hire some employee to extend their trade. unlikely other juveniles do not have the ability to be in work environment, actually they do not have enough talent in practical work, however they are suitable to work on academic environment and they have enough capacity to be success in their academic study. honestly, part time job helps the teenager to have a fundamental recognition of their ability.
Be summing up, teenagers are the most valuable members of our community. All of the parents as an important trainer of the community, should be serious about their children 's future and encourage them to work on part-time jobs during their study from the age of eighteen. moreover, government should contribute it's role in this events. the government should provide jobs for the teenagers and helps them to find own best career in the future.
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'besides', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'honestly', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'similarly', 'so', 'in regard to', 'in the second place']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228744939271 0.229887763892 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.151821862348 0.158761421928 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0951417004049 0.0866891130778 110% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0303643724696 0.046263068375 66% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0769230769231 0.0685040099705 112% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107287449393 0.118717715034 90% => OK
Participles: 0.0141700404858 0.0351676179071 40% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.74452791459 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0566801619433 0.0309702414327 183% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00202429149798 0.00188951952338 107% => OK
Determiners: 0.105263157895 0.0887237588012 119% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0222672064777 0.0209618222197 106% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00202429149798 0.0139019557991 15% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2709.0 2387.08602151 113% => OK
No of words: 447.0 408.028673835 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.06040268456 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.351230425056 0.338922669872 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.293064876957 0.251872472559 116% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.214765100671 0.174417080927 123% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.145413870246 0.112833075102 129% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74452791459 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451901565996 0.524397521467 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.8751946742 59.2087087015 84% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6684587814 73% => OK
Sentence length: 29.8 20.5533526081 145% => OK
Sentence length SD: 195.03089214 48.84282405 399% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 180.6 120.699889404 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8 20.5533526081 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.644075263715 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.54480286738 451% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 59.1064876957 45.7405998639 129% => OK
Elegance: 1.3515625 1.45489161554 93% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.450360713929 0.300154397459 150% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.169322036152 0.103427244359 164% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0943001853674 0.0752933317313 125% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.584576536624 0.497263757937 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.186236315656 0.151897553556 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.226382915845 0.114077575197 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143265543469 0.0781384742642 183% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.503885580146 0.336927656856 150% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.109919784641 0.067059652881 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.335679812505 0.210909579961 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114936488721 0.0618886996521 186% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.