TPO-25 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Recently, general awareness about whether or not young people nowadays are not given enough time to help their communities has aroused heated arguments. People, nevertheless have conflicting ideas. While some people say that many students give their time volunteering for communities, others deem otherwise. In my opinion, I agree that students nowadays usually do not spend time for their communities for two reasons. Firstly, students live in a extremely busy schedule and find it hard to arrange time for helping their communities. In addition, young people are selfish and reluctant to spend their time for others.

To begin with, students are pressed for time and don't have enough time to spend for community activities. Students live in a society pressured by grades and competition, and they are forced to spend most of their time studying. Sometimes they even lack time for sleeping and eating due to intense studying and competition. As a result, students are careless about helping other people in their communities. Even though they have free time, students prefer to use it for themselves relaxing and releasing stress rather than volunteering and involved in the community. For example, when I was young, I used to visit a local orphanage once a week for volunteering. However, as I entered high school and university I became increasingly busy doing my homework and preparing for exams, I found it harder and harder to arrange time for volunteering. Therefore, lack of time is one reason why students don't give enough time to volunteer for their communities.

Furthermore, students nowadays are becoming increasingly selfish. They do not understand the value of sharing and are reluctant to share their time and resources with other people. This is mainly due to the development of internet and electronic devices. Students who spend more time on the internet and on their personal devices spend less time communicating with friends and neighborhoods. They will not able to learn the value of sharing with other people. Also, they will neglect the importance and significance of the community. As a result, young people are becoming more and more unconcerned about being involved in their communities.

To sum up, I assert that students are being less involved in their community as their tight schedule in this busy society prevents them from doing so. Also, as young adults lack communication which is caused by their frequent use of electronic devices, which prevents them from using their time to help others.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... two reasons. Firstly, students live in a extremely busy schedule and find it har...
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Suggestion: don't
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Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2131.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22303921569 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83122822775 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463235294118 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2547445419 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.652173913 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7391304348 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.04347826087 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23455716996 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829381237309 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057558932169 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164461730881 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471030818359 0.0645574589148 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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