When thinking about the issue that youngsters nowadays are not willing to give enough time to help their communities, varied individuals will have diverse ideas. Some citizens claim that young people should help their communities as much as possible, since it is crucial for them to live a harmony life with their neighbor. However, from where I stand, youngsters currently have more critical things to focus on, so it is reasonable for them to reduce the time on help helping communities.
First and foremost, the overwhelm majority of metropolitans nowadays are required a high living cost. Since the fierce competition among young generation, they are facing more and more severe pressure, and they need to work very hard to fulfill their daily expenditure. In such a circumstance, it is impossible for them to devote their time on doing volunteer job. Take my elder brother who is a employee working in a foreign enterprise as an example. His salary is about five thousand RMB per month, which is fairly enough for small town' individuals. But he live in Shanghai which possess the highest living cost in China, and only way for him to improve his living quality is working hard and achieve every task perfectly. Therefore, it is a commonplace for him to work overtime, and he is prone to take a rest in weekend rather than helping communities. Since youngsters already live in large pressure and there are far more missions waited them to finish, it is not logical to spare time on helping others.
Furthermore, owing to the highly development of Internet, people tend to associate with friends on Internet, so they get little and little chance to be familiar with their neighbor or members in communities. As a result, individuals presumably will not offer help to someone who they are not acquainted. For instance, I bond with my friends through chat application like wechat and QQ, and I virtually know nothing about my neighbor. Thus I may feel quite awkward to get involved in community activities. In this way, youngsters are not willing to devote their time on helping communities for they are distant with communities' members.
In a nutshell, not only do young generations need to cope with their onerous working task, but also they are not familiar with the members in communities, so it is rational for them to give limit time to do volunteer job.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 470, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to help' or 'help'.
Suggestion: to help; help
...ble for them to reduce the time on help helping communities. First and foremost, the...
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Line 3, column 21, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ing communities. First and foremost, the overwhelm majority of metropolitans nowadays are ...
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Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...nteer job. Take my elder brother who is a employee working in a foreign enterpris...
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Line 5, column 435, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...rtually know nothing about my neighbor. Thus I may feel quite awkward to get involve...
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Line 7, column 155, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...amiliar with the members in communities, so it is rational for them to give limit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1971.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9275 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75898418807 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0241321345 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.941176471 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5294117647 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58823529412 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219213322994 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708507428213 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635251498309 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161891603729 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642016264603 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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