TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific r

Few things can be more important than choosing jobs for children, which can shape their life for at least several years or even longer. This also influence their economical conditions and social status. Some might say that since success is highly desired in our career, it is better to take jobs that are similar to our parents' jobs, so we can get more guidance. However, experience and support are not enough to make one perform well, actually there are more important elements including personal interests. What is more, finding different jobs can stimulate social mobility, thus bringing improvements and changes to the family.

To begin with, it is undeniable that the biggest advantages of following the path of parents is that young adults can get much more valuable experience and guidance compared to others, which makes them more competitive in the job market. Nonetheless, I would like to assert that this support from parents is limited, since the world is rapidly changing and old methods and ways of doing things may not apply to new time. New arrivals in a certain field should be given their own opportunities to make mistakes and to learn.

Secondly, it is generally believed were people to succeed, they must love what they do. If children only choose their jobs according to that of their parents, it is unlikely that they truly like that work, not to say they are enthusiastic about what they work on. In this circumstance, the chances are that young adults can not figure out the meaning of doing this particular job and lose the motivation to work hard.

Last but not least, following the paths of parents rules out the possibility of social mobility. In a BBC report, the journalist randomly interviewed two taxi drivers in the city of Shanghai, and was surprised to found that both of their daughters were studying economics. With the advent of public education, every one is supposed to have the ability to work in the field they want to, regardless of their parents' jobs.

In conclusion, though choosing jobs that are similar to parents' jobs can bring experience and guidance to children, the advantage of choosing a different work definitely outweigh the disadvantages. By doing so, not only can children choose the job they are really enthusiastic about, but also it brings about the possibilities for the family to move upward on social ladder.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 163, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, may, nonetheless, really, second, secondly, so, thus, well, at least, in conclusion, to begin with, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1985.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9625 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6223069519 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5375 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.3192635412 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0625 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.125 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322454708799 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103371067178 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0788420289052 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18327815342 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704102363918 0.0645574589148 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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