In my opinion, children could make huge influence to their family so it would be better to choose their own job not related to their parents' job. In general, some parents prefer to let their kid to have stable life, which parents imagine or they have now, however parents should support their kids to have choices. I will give few ideas to hold my opinion as followed passage.
From my personal experience, I gave huge impact to my family include cousins. All my family members studied about medical subject such as nursing or physical supporting skills so everyone talk about things happened at hospital or their work place because they understand even specific topics. On the other hand, I have studied about web design and also have done study abroad. I told my family about my experience in overseas countries and experiment by using cameras. After that, my mother gets interest to learn how to use a camera due to my story. Also, my cousin who have never been to abroad before was curious about Finland where I spent time as exchange student thus she decided to visit there and began to enhance her english skill. Obviously, my family was motivated by me to learn new things and I think they became open minded.
The other reason why I disagree with the statement is children should figure out what they want to become in their future. For example, my friend is a teacher because his parents also teach at high school. He told me that he has seen how his parents organize their life and being in stable life therefore he would prefer to choose same job because he did not want to worry about his money or quality of life. He sometime complains about his currently situation because he does not able to draw his future clearly. In contrast to him, the other friend is a chemist and trying to find new molecules every day. She is contented with her life because she does work with fun even she can not make enough money to live alone and also her future is not established yet. It would be changed whether she will invent new molecules or not. However, she definitely looks she found perfect job for herself. Hence, I would say that it seems happier if you know what you like to do and imagine your future by doing it.
All of considered, I disagree with the opinion that it is better for kids to have same jobs alike one their parents have. It would be nice if they know what they like to do and how passionate about it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 570, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put after the verb 'been'.
Suggestion: been never
...ra due to my story. Also, my cousin who never been to abroad before was curious about Finl...
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Line 5, column 422, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'complains'.
Suggestion: complains
...s money or quality of life. He sometime complain about his currently situation because h...
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Line 5, column 597, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...hemist and trying to find new molecules everyday. She is contented with her life because...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, i think, in contrast, in general, such as, you know, in contrast to, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1970.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52873563218 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23388194941 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6536685321 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8095238095 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210291127183 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632965162568 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906278486211 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162375206428 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0980295441353 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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