TPO 28
Generally, parents are concern about their children. They try to do best to help their children to progress in their life and make a better future. One aspect of concern contains educational matters. Some people believe that today parents are more involved in their children's education than what was in past, but others think it is not changed over the time. In my way of thinking nowadays parents are more cautious about their children's education because not only is it more important to have an education degree in the society, but also the behavior of people is changed in recent decades.
The first reason that should be stated here is that in passing the time, education gets a higher level of importance in the community. The percent of uneducated people are decreasing day by day, and most of the society people have high degrees. It forces parents to pay attention to their children education to help them to top states in the community and suitable future. But in the past, it did not matter how much education a person past, and follow that parents did not care about that. Another reason that makes education more important is technology developments. By promoting of technology the job requirements are changed; people can get jobs who have a better academic degree, so if parents want their children to have a suitable job in future, they should encourage them to study better and better.
The other point which deserves some words is that people are changing during the time. In the past, parents did not care about their children very much. They were busy and just tried to afford primary life needs for children. They did not pay attention to the children's emotional and educational aspects. But after a while, it changed. By promotion of science, the quality of life increased. People learned how to treat children. They understand that it is not their duty that just provides life staff for their children. Parents get that it is their duty to proper children for future. We can say that human get smarter by pasting the time. Ultimately, it results in involvement of parents in their education of children.
To summarize, today parents have more challenge with their children education. There are many reasons to prove that. One reason is enhancement of education position in the community, and another reason is behavior change of people. Who do you think is not agree with this statement.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 301, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...their childrens education than what was in past, but others think it is not changed ove...
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Line 3, column 744, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...t their children to have a suitable job in future, they should encourage them to study be...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 233, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Who” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...er reason is behavior change of people. Who do you think is not agree with this sta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2011.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90487804878 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52120218154 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451219512195 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.9216666475 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.3461538462 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7692307692 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.19230769231 5.45110844103 22% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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