Recently, a prevalent saying heard is that a host of schools takes the top priority to raise the professors' salaries in order to improve the quality of education. However, a greater amount of opponents propose that the education level fails to be enhanced simply by paying more to the faculty since there are more unpredictable aspects which jeopardize the advancement in education and the facilities in schools are also in need of money. As far as I am concerned, the latter one makes more senses.
In the first place, although the enthusiasm of professors can be largely increased due to the high salary, it does not mean that the students' performance will be improved correspondently. This is because other aspects will also exert influences on students' performances such as their rational curriculum design, fewer chances to get access to practice and impractical teaching contents and teaching texts. The rationality of above can be well reflected by the story of my school. As an attempt to increase the efficiency of studying, the management removed one month from our agendas. Although more knowledge was delivered to us in classes, the chances for fully digesting the concepts and equators became rather slim. Imaginably, we saw a failure of record high rate at the end of this semester. It is clearly noticeable that the failure in students' performances was mainly due to the unreasonable curriculum design. In this case, even the professors are more willing to teach the class because of the raised wage, the quality of education can still not is enhanced. Thus, the universities should not put the utmost emphasis on professors' payments.
Additionally, if the schools devote much of their funds into enhancing the faculty's salaries, the old equipment in the laboratory can not be improved and new advanced technology can not be purchased. Especially with the progress in science, more and more students take their top priority to do an experiment in labs. Thus, there is a definite link between how much students’ can learn and how great the lab is. My own story can well back up the rationality of above. Last month, our school purchased a set of new laboratory facilities from foreign countries. Within a day, the lab was full of students enjoying their experiments. By using the advanced technology, I not only reflected on what I have been learned but also gained some new knowledge. The benefits I reaped from it were virtually shared by every student I know. In this sense, the school should put more money in improving the laboratory infrastructure because it works better than professors to improve the quality of education.
Admittedly, a minority of individuals tend to believe that the high salary is a major stimulus to professors to devote more energy to teaching. The supporters fail to take into account that the improvement in student’s performance and quality of education is a complicated issue which cannot simply be brought by the professors’ performances.
To sum up, I am on the opposite side of this claim. What is more, it's is essential for us to take various factors into account to improve the quality of education since it's of great importance to the development and growth of students.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In the first place, although the enthusiasm of professors can be largely increased due to the high salary, it does not mean that the students' performance will be improved correspondently.
Error: correspondently Suggestion: No alternate word
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 537 350
No. of Characters: 2638 1500
No. of Different Words: 261 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.814 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.912 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.841 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 190 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 157 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 115 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 75 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.48 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.617 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.48 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.264 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.442 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.054 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Recently, a prevalent saying heard is th...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d, the latter one makes more senses. In the first place, although the enthusi...
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Line 3, column 139, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... high salary, it does not mean that the students performance will be improved correspond...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ost emphasis on professors payments. Additionally, if the schools devote much...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to improve the quality of education. Admittedly, a minority of individuals te...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'thus', 'well', 'such as', 'to sum up', 'what is more', 'in the first place']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.241610738255 0.229887763892 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.145973154362 0.158761421928 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0872483221477 0.0866891130778 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0637583892617 0.046263068375 138% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0385906040268 0.0685040099705 56% => OK
Prepositions: 0.127516778523 0.118717715034 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0385906040268 0.0351676179071 110% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9886753995 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0369127516779 0.0309702414327 119% => OK
Particles: 0.00335570469799 0.00188951952338 178% => OK
Determiners: 0.110738255034 0.0887237588012 125% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0201342281879 0.0209618222197 96% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.010067114094 0.0139019557991 72% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3270.0 2387.08602151 137% => OK
No of words: 537.0 408.028673835 132% => OK
Chars per words: 6.08938547486 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.48200974243 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.366852886406 0.338922669872 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.301675977654 0.251872472559 120% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.221601489758 0.174417080927 127% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.154562383613 0.112833075102 137% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9886753995 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504655493482 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 60.8677814213 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.48 20.5533526081 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.135895968 48.84282405 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.8 120.699889404 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.48 20.5533526081 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.52 0.644075263715 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 51.6475977654 45.7405998639 113% => OK
Elegance: 1.64189189189 1.45489161554 113% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345085645994 0.300154397459 115% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0719439944164 0.103427244359 70% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0509553436917 0.0752933317313 68% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.520538552078 0.497263757937 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.18051871593 0.151897553556 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142176785439 0.114077575197 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732071002257 0.0781384742642 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.504376067565 0.336927656856 150% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.103226159903 0.067059652881 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267428488516 0.210909579961 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0175879436368 0.0618886996521 28% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8870967742 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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