TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

Doctors, Engineers, actors are some of job in each society. Having a job is so important because many aspects of men's life related to this, so people should be chose it meticulously. in this regard, many people wonder where is more enjoyable to have a job. there are many points of view in this issue. One stands in this issue is that it is more enjoyable to have a job where people work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. As far as I'm concerned, I concur with this idea. In following statements, I will provide two reasons for my answer.

The first reason coming in my mind is that people who work only three days a week have more free time for spending with their household. therefore, it is more enjoyable for them because spending time with family members is so fun. they can do more entertainment than the second groups (people who work five days a week) cannot do. for example, they can travel the rest of week in which they don't work, because they have 4 days for resting that is too much so they can use this time for traveling while the second groups don't have enough time for traveling.

The Second, if ones work 3 days at the beginning days of a week other people can work at the rest of a week. therefore, in this society people can find job easily, so this country will be vivacious. In the contrast, if people don't have a job, they will be gloomy. For example, according to the reports of Iran Estatistic Worker ( IEW), the majority of people in Iran are jobless and the most of them are dismal ,so they attempt to suicide. Only fewer of them adapt themselves to this condition. IEW asserts that if they had jobs, they never killed themselves. Therefore, not only a person who work three days a week is happy, but also he provides opportunity for others to have a job and helps them to be happy.
The third reason in this regard is that having a 3 days' job in a week help to reduce traffic and eventually it decreases air pollution. Many people use their own car to go work, so it causes a congested traffic in crowded cities. If people don't want to go work at least 4 days a week, so it is not necessary that they drive car to reach their office. Thus, it reduces traffic and prevents of air pollution.
All in all, having a job where people work 3 days a week for long hours are more enjoyable, because they can spend more time with their family member, and people can find job easily. Therefore, isn't it better to stop five days a week work?

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...can find job easily. Therefore, isnt it better to stop five days a week work?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, third, thus, while, at least, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2059.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.30753138075 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.276859084 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.42050209205 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1179165125 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.7916666667 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9166666667 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58333333333 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.434021479231 0.236089414692 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136147040887 0.076458572812 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.14434130757 0.0737576698707 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283459215562 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103707073633 0.0645574589148 161% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.72 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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