TPO-31- Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to

In this modern age, technology and science are developing and everything is changing fast. This cause so many changes in the way people live. While some may think people are as happy as they were in the past, I believe people were more gratifying than they are today.
First, people tolerate more stress and pressure. Because technology has developed, the job market needs more skills for labor. So, people need to study more to earn these skills and abilities. For achieving this goal, they have to take many exams which cause stress and pressure. So, people have to bear much stress. Besides, the job market is more competitive than before. Unemployment, which is a major cause of stress and anxiety, is one of the worst problems for people who have fewer skills. People in the past need to have fewer skills for making money. For example, they need to carry some loads, but this work now is done by machines. Furthermore, because of changes in technology, jobs change too. As a result, people should consistently develop and improve their abilities according to these changes. This lead to having a stress and pressure to do not lose their job if their employers do not need them anymore.
Second, people have less time for having fun. Because employers want to adapt to changes which occur around them, they ask their employees to work for long hours. Therefore, people have less time to pass their time with their family and their friends to have a fun. As well, they have fewer leisure times. By being so, people are not able to refresh themselves. As a consequence, the main aspects of their lives are their work. However, people should balance their life. They should notice to all aspect of their life. Family, friends and leisure time are as important as work. People in the past spend more time with their family and assign more time for leisure. But, nowadays people have less time for these things and consequently, they are not as happy as they were in the past. For instance, I am working for a company for six days every week. I have to work overtime too. I only have one day as a weekend. So, I have less leisure time for being with my family and my friends.
To sum up, I think people today are less satisfying than they were in the past because everything is changing fast. Because they tolerate more stress and have less leisure time.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1943.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65947242206 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27700588328 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.431654676259 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.383533959 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 60.71875 100.406767564 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.03125 20.6045352989 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241878098092 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774324692385 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596418848989 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184449235646 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310755317804 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.86 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.63 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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