Technology development leads the world to a whole new engaging and comfortable place and changing it abruptly in order to fit it with themselves. However, this gives us a controversial question that people feel unhappy and unsatisfied than the past. From my point of view, because the rules and requirements of society become stricter, most people find hard it to follow and not get adequate enjoy.
Above all, the speeding improved society creates a stress for people in many ways such as traffic and the stress drives a depression that robs the happiness and satisfaction of people. Moreover, the economic abyss takes a huge place to create unemployment. Because most people believe money is the main key to success and happiness, they make their mind unhappy even though how happy they are when they think about the lack of money. For instance, one crucial part of the valuable life is, of course, food. However, no one cannot get anything if they have no money even though they are pretty, knowledgeable or not.
Another reason is, people have not enough free time because the competition of everything has become crazy. As a result, I think people feel less satisfied because they cannot do their personal enjoyment activities. In order to get a successful people in the future, they need many diplomas, experiences, a stable job or they cannot be the one who appreciated by everyone except the talented ones. From my personal experience, I need to work hard and concentrate on my academic knowledge to get into a high ranked university that will encourage me to the way of success.
All in all, society changes itself and people together. Also, I think people realize that even though the money is powerful, it cannot provide us with happiness when they already lost their every time to earn it.
- TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U 76
- TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th 60
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- TOEFL TPO 10 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school. Use specific reasons to support your answer. 83
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, for instance, i think, of course, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1505.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 306.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91830065359 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65716822079 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578431372549 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4899147698 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.5 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8571428571 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186322477876 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665890026091 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568004088238 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122970444119 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354799923613 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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