Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Humans are the unique creatures of the world that harm or improve everything by its great intelligence. However, they only create things to fit the world with its own need, not to make considerable changes in it. Most people concerned that the world will be a better place if the humans do not exist in here while others strongly disagree with it. From my sight, even though people are not willing to damage the Earth, they do it indirectly.
To begin with, because of money, which is the measurement of everything in the world, people overhunting animals which causes some species to become extinct in the near future. As an example, the number of whales dramatically decreased because of human activities that also affect greatly on the population of the small sea species such as otter. This is because the huge whales have to change its diet to small animals when their main food become rare. Moreover, people also hunt animals because of clothes, not only because of food. In harsh weather conditions, people need to cover its weak body with animal fur such as fox. I think those infinitive need of humans actually break the balance of the Earth and also harm the population other species.
Furthermore, human activities create many pollutions in everything on the Earth, in water, in the air and so on. Besides, the inventions of people in order to make their life easier have a great bad impact on the whole Earth. For example, because of the overwhelming amount of carbon dioxide which is the result of the industrial activities, the ozone of the Earth has broke day by day. Also, because the waters that animals feed has a numerous pollution, it becomes the main factor of the dramatic declining of an animal population. It cannot influence people because we have a special way to make the water pollution-free for only ourselves.
All in all regardless of the people is the one creature of the Earth, it did not balance things happen on it like rest of the species. Indeed, the disadvantages of human activity considerably outweigh its advantaged on both humans, animals, and plants.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, while, for example, i think, in fact, such as, on the whole, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1745.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84722222222 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61925296814 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536111111111 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.7295826424 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.647058824 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1764705882 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.17647058824 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235908722495 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803760979926 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626042369238 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146354820955 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513030546521 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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