TPO 32 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is undeniable that young people are crucial part of our society. They have an important role in their community. In my opinion, they have a great influnce on many important decisions that determine the future of society as awhole. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, young people are the majority of any country, so when they want any idea to be applied, their voice can be heard. For instance, in my country, 70% of people are young. Last year, a group of them were trying to change one of my city's rules to allow people younger than forty years old to be part of the managment team of the ministry of economy. Therefor, they filled an application for that, and collected a thousands signs from people at that age. There were a lot of people who wanted this law to be change, so they forced the ministry to put their wants into consideration. Nowadays, there is almost 45% young people at the managment team.
Second, young people are the spirit of the future. They have the knowledg of the past, and the creativity needed for having a brilliant future. For example, my brother Sami and his friends are at their early thirties. When they started their career, they were trying to improve the way that the government handle roads with heavy snow. They were expert engineers in the weather field. At the same time, they have young souls that need to defet obstacles and complete their life during harsh conditions. A creative project sent to the minister to evaluate it, and now, they are waiting for the approval to apply it on the next year winter.
In conclusion, I strongely believe that young people have a great influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole, not only because they are a big part of the society, but also their role will benefit the community as whole because they are educated and full of ideas. That is why I suggest that contries have to give more attension for them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 421, Rule ID: A_HUNDREDS[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. Consider using: 'a thousand'
Suggestion: a thousand
... an application for that, and collected a thousands signs from people at that age. There we...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1638.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58823529412 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36182795574 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526610644258 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8236012709 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2105263158 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7894736842 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52631578947 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167341384537 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596675334636 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560100449296 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131801091958 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621205517571 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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