The future is unknown to us, but we can predict it from the event occurring at the current time. Young people, most energetic and powerful generation, do the main things for the development of the society. Although many people believe that adult will not keep any impact on the world, other oppose this. As per as I am concerned, I believe that young people will obviously influence their environment. I feel this way for two most important reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, young people are more adaptive to the new technology. As the technical improvement has the most influential impact on the earth, and young people able to handle and invent new technology, they will change the world. On the other hand, the old people aren't able to catch the rapid change of technology; indeed, most of the elderly people do not like that invention at all. My own experience is a compelling example of this. After my graduation, I joined a private geotechnical consultancy company, and here I have learned much new stuff which was very fascinating to me. However, my boss, who is about 50 year, did not like those technical change; as a result, he refused to handle matters like the use of 3D printer for our design, develop new program for sort the test result, and do research for the innovative invention. As a young and energetic member of my company, I develop and modify the old version of the program which the company had used for 20 years. So, I feel that young generation will enhance the world by using and inventing new technical inventions.
Secondly, adults are more energetic and have more desire to work hard; this is very important to continue the development. As young people are not involving with the real world, they have the power to change the living qualities of the society. For example, my younger brother, 14, has an aspiration to solve the local pollution problem, as he is young and energetic, he worked hard for it. He discussed this matter with his friends, other family members, and the older people, and form a club in our village. He did not stop by establishing the club, he arranged all of his friends and collect money from the whole village and from the local market as well. Finally, he created a waste disposal system in our society. This system changed our village a lot, clean areas and pure air are the main outcomes of his work. To sum up, this example tells us that our future how much depend on adult people.
In conclusion, it is clear that young people are the most prominent part of our society and they will improve our surrounding. This is because they are more adaptive to the rapidly changing world and because they are more energetic. Therefore, we should not worry about our future since they are in the right away.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2310.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67611336032 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50024831169 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497975708502 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 722.7 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1396672595 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.25 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5833333333 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104006659243 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0326824023939 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0318879397511 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0674643493812 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0158864797038 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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