Technology is changing every day. Means of communication and entertainment are evolving with the introduction of new technologies. Smart phones, social networking sites and video games have already invaded our lives, but the most impact it left is on youth. Educating a child was never an easy task but today it has become extremely challenging. I agree, educating children is more difficult task today due to overexposure to peripheral distractions for few reasons. Teachers, parents need to work extra hard to bring back focus on studies.
First, mobile phones in the classroom creates distraction not only for the child who is using it during the class, but also for the entire class. Children miss important discussions about difficult topics, even fail to note test dates, homework submission dates. While working as high school teacher in my previous job, I have taken away countless number of cell phones from students who ignored "No cell phone in the class" policy. Easy access to cell phones, social networking sites along with video games are one of the root cause of decline in grade levels.
Possession of high end electronic devices and number of friend followers on the social sites has become status symbol. Sometimes age inappropriate information, violence is presented through these sites and games. Children waste time on phones or video games instead of studying or playing any sport. Children face cut throat competition today and are under more stress than ever before. Children are ready to lose their sleeping time to catch up on these activities. Inadequate sleep and irregular sleeping patterns also causing children to lose focus in the class. Obesity, anxiety, depression is on the rise. Exercise helps to lower stress levels. But lack of physical activity giving way to various health issues.
Considering these main reasons, I strongly agree with the fact that it has become challenging to educate children nowadays than in the past. However, I think parents and teachers' role is crucial in advocating children about the proper use of the technologies.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 388, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...are under more stress than ever before. Children are ready to lose their sleeping time t...
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Line 7, column 44, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
...sidering these main reasons, I strongly agree with the fact that it has become challenging to educate ch...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, while, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 43.0788530466 35% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25595238095 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71553203425 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8629919975 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0952380952 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253630469025 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592314699989 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538677981239 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140729167759 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308704734214 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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