TPO 36- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children(five to ten years old) than to spend money on university
Since the dawn of civilization, education has played a pivotal role in peoples lives. By gaining knowledge, people can more easily cope with their issues. The question which arises here is whether governments should invest in young children's education or university students. Some people opt for the former one; However, others might deem that the latter might carries more weight. I, personally, contend that governments should spend money on young children's education. In what follows, I elaborate on my viewpoint and provide some details to explicate my opinion.
The first remarkable reason to be mentioned is that according to scientists, the best time for educating a person is in his childhood. In other words, in this period, the mind and brain are readier to learn, and the process of learning will occur faster. By teaching important tips of life in their childhood, they will be prepared for the real world and be useful members of society while teaching some skills in adulthood seems useless. For example, the ability to work in a team, which is of great importance, only could be learned in early ages. So it better that governments allocate more budget on young children's education.
Another equally important point is that as adults have a lot of different concerns in their life, they could not concentrate well on their education. They have more serious responsibilities which take lots of their energy. However, a child has none of these concerns, and everything is prepared for them. So it is reasonable to focus on learning from the early ages to see its fruitful results.
In conclusion, having considered the reasons mentioned above into account, I believe that under no circumstances should governments put less attention into children's education because it not only will bring future results it will also have monetary benefits in the long term. It is highly recommended that school managers and counselors provide additional measures and facilities to enhance the process of training children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'betters', 'wells'?
Suggestion: betters; wells
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18429003021 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74927127241 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598187311178 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4572860572 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.941176471 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4705882353 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173561180587 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551049074308 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543718415726 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0948677362489 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542974746287 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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