TPO 38
When a baby is born, it seems that he or she has no ability except crying. However, by getting older he or she learns walking, speaking, and then writing. One of the most important soft skills during working age of each person is leadership. .There is a debate in this case as to whether this ability could be achieved by exercise or not. An outstanding argument states that leadership is a kind of art and is something natural that could not be learned. I repudiate it strongly. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two noticeable reasons.
The first idea, which deserves some words here, is that the most important thing to learn something is motivation. By having enough motivation for doing something, you can catch it. Likewise, the leadership is not an exception to this thesis. Even though people have the different initial state of reaching their goals, means their abilities and their knowledge, they can achieve it. The only thing that changes as a result of this difference is the amount of perseverance they should have. For instance, as we see in Paralympic competitions, there are many disable athletics, who have more physical abilities than a normal enable human. This means that if a person is motivated to be a powerful leader, regardless of his/her current situation, he/she can reach it.
Another equally significant point is that leadership is just some sort of methods and rules. There are many universities and colleges, which admit prospective students, who have no experience in leadership but have some work experiences, and teach them these methods. These universities are at the top of the university rankings and have strong faculties in management and leadership fields. Consequently, these universities have excellent outcomes, who are the most successful and prominent leaders in the world. Accordingly, there is a way to teach leadership to people with no business and management background. Perhaps a more specific and first-hand experience can shed more light on the matter. One of my cousins, after ten years working in a company as an employee, decided to attend a business course at Sharif University of Technology. After two years, when he has graduated, he could find a project manager position in another company with two times more salary. Hence, I think everyone can learn these rules of leadership.
In summary, all the presented ideas above bring us to the conclusion that leadership is not a natural ability of persons. However, reaching this ability needs great motivation and hard working. I hope that no one deprived of his/her aim in the future by these motivation killer statements.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 119, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to walk'.
Suggestion: to walk
...ever, by getting older he or she learns walking, speaking, and then writing. One of the...
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Line 1, column 243, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...rking age of each person is leadership. .There is a debate in this case as to whe...
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Line 1, column 244, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
...king age of each person is leadership. .There is a debate in this case as to whether ...
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Line 1, column 275, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ership. .There is a debate in this case as to whether this ability could be achieved by exerc...
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Line 4, column 254, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this motivation' or 'these motivations'?
Suggestion: this motivation; these motivations
...eprived of his/her aim in the future by these motivation killer statements.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, likewise, so, then, as to, for instance, i think, in summary, kind of, sort of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2233.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08656036446 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87394623101 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544419134396 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.2302184642 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8846153846 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8846153846 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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