People rely on jobs to financially and psychologically secure their future. Time passing, careers have experienced tremendous changes. On one hand, there is a group who believe that nowadays finding a proper job which guarantees your future and assures you that there will not be any lost, is challenging. On the other hand, there is another group who consider it as an exaggeration and apparently, hold the opposite view of point. Admittedly, based on my observations I agree with the former attitude toward condition of jobs. People have numerous explicit reasons regarding to the argument and I would explore some which are conspicuous for me.
To begin with, nowadays, world has brought innumerable jobs to the existence. You as a person now, have many possible jobs to choose and deciding between them is very arduous work to do. Considering that you have variety of interests and gifts, you may have got interested in different jobs which all emerged during last decade, no one, however, is aware about their prospect. Keeping that in mind that money is not always the case when you choose a job, you may find it too boring in the future. For example, once I have got interested in website developing and the other time in digital photo editing which both are among new emerged jobs. Accordingly, I started to work on for short time in both career which turned to be very exhausting and boring for me. Anyone around me did not have any experience and knowledge about them and so they could not consult me. And after short time I needed to change my career. So as you can see, numerous jobs do not guarantee your success.
Furthermore, job prospects are vague because of the emerging of technology. You see all around the new technologies based on programming, neural network, artificial intelligence and robotic which are going to take the place of people in doing tasks. For instance, there is a new Iranian application, termly “Snap” which is similar to “Uber” in USA. People were used to call taxi agencies to transport in a city. Currently, they all have installed the application on their smartphones and use it to find a geographically closer taxi to them. We should not undermine the applications too, because they facilitate our lives. However, it has caused elimination of some jobs like taxi agency managers which has damaged them. According to that, now if someone chooses to be a manager of taxi agency, he can’t be assured that he will have stable job and subsequently persistent income and flourishing prospect. There are also worries that same may happen for other jobs, too.
To conclude, careers future is not secure anymore not only in order to emerging innumerable jobs, but also for the developing technologies which are taking the place of people’s careers. Taking them into account, I would draw the conclusion that jobs prospects is getting worse and it needs us to have deeper look in the situation.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. 80
- TPO 46 Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement The opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people Use specific reasons and examp 85
- Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them 70
- TPO 41 - integrated writing 78
- TPO 37 3
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, apparently, but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, regarding, so, for example, for instance, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2467.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95381526104 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84861351504 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528112449799 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 796.5 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6069312638 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8846153846 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1538461538 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65384615385 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116168801961 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0365166507592 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347421364615 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0781821670902 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354260841609 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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