According to the reading passage three possible benefits exist for electronically recording of medical information in the United States. In contrary, the speaker refutes all the claim by explaining that the benefits of the effort will actually be uncertain and she opposes all three reasons one by one.
First, the author explains that recording medical information electronically will reduce costs. While, the professor posits that the reduction will be unlikely significant. To clarify it, she demonstrates that there will not happen any saving because doctors do not throw the documents of their patients away and use them as emergency backups. Consequently, they will still need some storage to maintain them safe which will cost for them.
Second, the text claims that the recording process will prevent some errors which happen due to illegible handwriting and transcriptions of data and so on. Conversely, the lecturer states that using electronic records cannot eliminate this kind of errors. To put her idea forward, she illustrates that doctors will still need to use pen and pencils to take notes about their patients and other staff member will need to interpret the notes and submit them electronically. Accordingly, if there was any error in the notes such as illegible handwriting, it will be transferred to the electronic version, too.
Third, the reading posits that the electronic recording will help researchers to easily collect required data about patients. In contrast, the professor explains that it will not necessarily aid researchers. Considering the strict privacy law for getting access to the medical data in the U.S., the researchers need to follow a complicated procedure to access them which will be difficult and exhausting. Additionally, the information can be uncertain, too, because patients would block their information for some specific reasons.
- TOEFL TPO 46 - Integrated Writing Task 90
- TPO 41 - integrated writing 78
- TPO-11 - Integrated Writing Task A recent study reveals that people especially young people are reading far less literature,novels, plays, and poems,than they used to. This is troubling because the trend has unfortunate effects for the reading public, for 71
- TOEFL TPO 46 - Integrated Writing Task 90
- TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ation electronically will reduce costs. While, the professor posits that the reductio...
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...y backups. Consequently, they will still need some storage to maintain them safe ...
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...lly. Accordingly, if there was any error in the notes such as illegible handwriti...
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...sferred to the electronic version, too. Third, the reading posits that the elect...
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..., the information can be uncertain, too, because patients would block their infor...
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... information for some specific reasons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, consequently, conversely, first, if, second, so, still, third, while, in contrast, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 5.04856512141 396% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 293.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45051194539 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9428702436 2.5805825403 114% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552901023891 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0567675696 49.2860985944 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.071428571 110.228320801 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9285714286 21.698381199 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 7.06452816374 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312354368951 0.272083759551 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126682817587 0.0996497079465 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0996701588136 0.0662205650399 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208240576826 0.162205337803 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326669801057 0.0443174109184 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.3589403974 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 53.8541721854 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.2367328918 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.