TPO 39 - Independent taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No doubt that these days technology help people to get data about everything they want to know, as a result , every one can decide what is the best for them. This fact has many advantages and some disadvantages. While talking about career in past and future , I believe with all these facilities and resources which are available for people , they can decide much easier about the career they choose rather than in past. Here I am going to describe some of the factors to prove this idea.
To begin with, internet and social network can help you to get enough data about the carer that a person could select in market. For this reason, he or she could select the job with wide eyes and analysis all the facilities. In fact, a computer job which has many field to work in can be selected by many computer students who graduated from university, but depend on their knowledge and their ability, they can select the specific field such as machine learning or databases and extra. Consequently, their future view of their job will be much improved than past.
Secondly, long time ago, no one had access to all the possible job available in market related to his or her education, as a result, people with strong relation with others could get good opportunities and the rest with good knowledge never could get sufficient job. But, these days easily with accessing to internet, with small search, they can find all positions in all companies and apply to them and get a good job with the future they desire. For Instance, one of the good engineers in a big company was talking about, how he reached to his company when no internet and facilities were available and how hard was that, likewise, his son got easy job in a famous company with better position as him by using internet and social networks which are available in today word.
Thirdly, in the past the number of companies were less and the position availability were very less so you couldn’t select with position you want, they select you which position to be in. Hence, you never was happy with the company you worked for. For example, a guy with chemistry certificate had to be a security for money only not because she like the job . But these days because of the improvement of industry, many jobs available for all kind of education and every one could get a job in his or her field with brilliant future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 21, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'days'' or 'day's'?
Suggestion: days'; day's
No doubt that these days technology help people to get data abou...
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Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...verything they want to know, as a result , every one can decide what is the best f...
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Line 1, column 259, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... talking about career in past and future , I believe with all these facilities and...
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Line 1, column 311, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... with all these facilities and resources which are available for people , they ca...
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Line 1, column 343, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...esources which are available for people , they can decide much easier about the c...
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Line 1, column 415, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...bout the career they choose rather than in past. Here I am going to describe some of th...
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Line 1, column 452, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...an in past. Here I am going to describe some of the factors to prove this idea. To begin w...
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Line 2, column 259, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun field seems to be countable; consider using: 'many fields'.
Suggestion: many fields
...ties. In fact, a computer job which has many field to work in can be selected by many comp...
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Line 3, column 461, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...th the future they desire. For Instance, one of the good engineers in a big compa...
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Line 4, column 199, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was never
...you which position to be in. Hence, you never was happy with the company you worked for. ...
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Line 4, column 358, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... money only not because she like the job . But these days because of the improveme...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, for example, for instance, in fact, kind of, no doubt, such as, talking about, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1949.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61848341232 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40653837816 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485781990521 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.8624071426 48.9658058833 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.933333333 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1333333333 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6666666667 5.45110844103 232% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157584409332 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618423330125 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366172968712 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102656333325 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0194827737099 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.