TPO 44- independent
having fun with kids is better or helping them do their homework?
Nowadays, as the world has become more complex and volatile, people do not have enough time spending with their families, especially their kids, in comparison with their grand parents. In this context, there are myriad mutually exclusive ideas regarding whether playing games and sports is a good way of spending time with kids or helping them in their school assignments is more satisfactory. From my point of view, I am inclined to the former opinion in spite of the fact that the latter has more aficionados among adults. My answer to this debating bone of contention is twofold, and in the following, the rationale behind it will be elaborated by the most outstanding, solid proofs.
The first and foremost reason which is worth mentioning is that playing and having fun with children make a great bonding between parents and their kids, more especifically between the father and his sons, and the mother and her daughters. This action makes kids to think higher of their parents. Playing diverse games, such as video games, football, and boardgames, is one of the most critical phenomena that psycologists have always advised parents to do with their kids in order to enrich their relations. As an illustration, my cousin, Ali, always thought that his father is a failure, and unfortunately he was ashamed of him. After a while, his father got used to playing hobbies with him which completely altered Ali's belief. Afterwards, they are now considered as their each others' best friends in our whole family. Thus, having more fun with kids in sparetimes is a great way of holding a family together.
The second and equally far-reaching rationalization to bear in mind is that this notion is useful, mainly because it will positively influence kids' educational and psycological situations. To put it into a more vivid picture, researchers of RMIT university, one of the greatest knowledge institutes of Australia, have conducted a survey of Melbourne's highschool students among whom they disseminated a questionnaire and realized that there is a direct exponential relation between the level of their educational success and the amount of time the enjoy with their families. They realized that adolescents having more fun with their parents will have reached a better and healthier life by their 30's in comparison to the kids who only have the experiencing of involving their families in their homework. Therefore, it is highly suggested that parents stop forcing their kids to always study, and spend some times playing with them and increase their level of self-esteem and self-confidence.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned explanations into account, I am prone to this notion that spending the sparetime platying with kids is more beneficial for both parents and kids even though there are some exceptions which can be excluded from the general rule. To recapitulate my opinion, not only do parents and kids get to know each other by playing games, but also kids will benefit psycologically and educationally from this action since this will improve their self-esteem and self confidence and help them to do better in their schools.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 544, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...cational success and the amount of time the enjoy with their families. They realized that...
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Line 5, column 920, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ways study, and spend some times playing with them and increase their level of se...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2645.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14591439689 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8833610313 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513618677043 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 810.0 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.1594184989 48.9658058833 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.588235294 100.406767564 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2352941176 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359857022794 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11846597921 0.076458572812 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0951520151069 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23231114463 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364566098759 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 11.7677419355 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 86.8835125448 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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