TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

A controversial debate which is often raised about what busy parents should do with children in free time. Some groups of parents hold the view that they should play or exercise with them to make them stronger. However, the other groups may take an opposite point and believe that they should spend time educating. From my vantage point, I concur with the latter groups and believe that children with good education can meet the demand of this competitive world. In the following paragraph, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through three major reasons.

The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that parents who spend time teaching their children can improve their knowledge. Knowledge is the weapon which we can provide to our kids to be winners. Without such a weapon, children cannot compete with others in this competitive demanding world . A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above is the skills that children learn when parents educate them. They become motivated,skilled, and able to organize their work in a proper manner. Thus, children in this situation do not only gain knowledge, but also become good planners.

The second reason which deserves some words here is that educated children instead of playing with them save them time. If children spend lot of time studying by themselves, they develop low self esteem. By helping children in their home works we can shorten the time they spend studying and Ultimately enhance their self confidence, this will help them to thrive in the future.

Although the aforementioned reasons are the first ones which cross the mind at a glance, they are by no means the only reasons available. In fact, there is another subtle point which must be born in mind. The noteworthy refreshing intelligible statistics, revealed by a recent research conducted on parents who prioritize educating children than playing with them, the study demonstrate that confidently children where able to accomplish their objectives. The study was done among 120 parents from different organisation to avoid any bias.

To wrap up, contemplating all aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that with the limited time available for parents to spend with their children, It is better to make use of this time educating them because by doing so, we can pave the way for a successful future.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, thus, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10309278351 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68322837533 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561855670103 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1657454286 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.210526316 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4210526316 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21052631579 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271699442847 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856578817336 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686258963263 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16608208053 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586187488512 0.0645574589148 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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