Nobody doubts that parents have the most significant role in preparing their children for the future and for the society. It is almost proven that kids feel most comfortable and confident when their parents are along side them most of the time. Due to modern life, it is almot impossible for some parents to afford that to their children. Germane to this fact, a question that is matter of debate, a controversial one, is whether parents should allocate that short, remaining time with their children to fun activities or helping them with schoolwork. Although it might not be accpeted by all, I am personally on the conviction that parents should spend that time playing sports with their children or any other kind of activities that their kids are interested in.
One compelling reason deserving to be mentioned is that kids personallity takes shape in their childhood. Psychologically speaking, playing sports or using building block toys to build up a construstion or anyother activity involving group work or creativity is the most prominent factor in developing a kid's personality. To elaborate, it can give them confidence and help them to avoid stress or anxiety later in the real life, because they have practiced in their childhood. Therefore, based on proved psychologic theories, parents should spend their limited free time with their children doing sports or fun activites.
Another reason substantiating my stance which is equally important, if not more, is that playing fun sports with the kids, can support them emotionally which is crucial for the kids in school times. To delineate, kids wants their parent to pay attention to their feelings and decisions. Generally speaking, shool-aged children spend most of their time doing works related to school which is an unpleasant event. Thus, children expect their parents to prevent from bringing up shcoolwork or anythign relavant to school. They demand their parents to be emotionally aware that they simply want to have fun, it's their inherent characteristic. As a result, if parents ignore this request from their kids and spend their limited free time doing school-related works can cause an emotional separation between them and their kids which can lead to serious mentally damages to their kids in the future.
To recapitulate, not only improving the kid's personallity, but also supporting them emtionally proves my opinion about the issue. Although all parents might not be agreed with my, with respect, I am convinced that having a fun time is the best way to spend the time with kids and I strongly recommend this based on psychologic principles.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'alongside'?
Suggestion: alongside
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'kids'' or 'kid's'?
Suggestion: kids'; kid's
...e most prominent factor in developing a kids personality. To elaborate, it can give ...
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Suggestion:
... the kids in school times. To delineate, kids wants their parent to pay attention...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ware that they simply want to have fun, its their inherent characteristic. As a res...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'kind of', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.233404710921 0.229887763892 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.17130620985 0.158761421928 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0813704496788 0.0866891130778 94% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0492505353319 0.046263068375 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0877944325482 0.0685040099705 128% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.10278372591 0.118717715034 87% => OK
Participles: 0.0599571734475 0.0351676179071 170% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79630392353 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0449678800857 0.0309702414327 145% => OK
Particles: 0.00428265524625 0.00188951952338 227% => OK
Determiners: 0.0663811563169 0.0887237588012 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0192719486081 0.0209618222197 92% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0149892933619 0.0139019557991 108% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2631.0 2387.08602151 110% => OK
No of words: 427.0 408.028673835 105% => OK
Chars per words: 6.16159250585 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.35831381733 0.338922669872 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.276346604215 0.251872472559 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.194379391101 0.174417080927 111% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.140515222482 0.112833075102 125% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79630392353 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503512880562 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 56.4389999477 59.2087087015 95% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 25.1176470588 20.5533526081 122% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.512597353 48.84282405 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.764705882 120.699889404 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1176470588 20.5533526081 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.470588235294 0.644075263715 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 52.7523074804 45.7405998639 115% => OK
Elegance: 1.28472222222 1.45489161554 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.470142855267 0.300154397459 157% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.113964867332 0.103427244359 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0562255676409 0.0752933317313 75% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.553416959108 0.497263757937 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.107341617346 0.151897553556 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.199943478203 0.114077575197 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078175510906 0.0781384742642 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.392611817195 0.336927656856 117% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0838035444843 0.067059652881 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.337908167821 0.210909579961 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0890192434579 0.0618886996521 144% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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